Red candy syrup stains the white wall.
Oh how lovely it looks.
There's some on my hand as well.
Deary me, it's pretty.
I jut the knife in.
So that's where it comes from.
My eyes, the killer.
At age ten.
The heat rises off the red hot fudge.
That pale flesh, ice cream.
I just want to take a spoon and eat it all up.
It looks tasty.
I watch as it flows aplenty.
Wondering what would happen.
Then rip goes the arm.
I smile at age twenty....
A child from my womb now.
Never knowing what I have done.
I hide it all away...
In the flame it burns.
I smile gently to the little birdie.
She'll never know what mommy has done.
I hold her close as she grows in life.
Peaceful now that I'm thirty.
As she grows
I wish to show her someday.
How little kiddies
should really play.....
I won't though......
Squealing at the crunch of bones.
My mommy will never know.....
That her little girl's
best friend is a dead crow.
A contest entry
- Impress The Doctor of Halloween and Horrors! by FinalWhisper.
1300 points, ended November 6, 34 entries
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Another one of those twisted tales.....
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"Blood on the family tree"
I love the title ^-^ And the rest of this write too!
The girl is just ten?! O__o
Man.. the detail you put into this! =] "The crunch of bones..." "red candy syrup..." The imagry is intense.. ^^
this write scares the hel outta meh..
but thats a good thing ^.^
-Seth
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Thanks, it was for a contest...but as you can see, it didn't go anywhere...oh well, thanks for reading!
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great write i love the cryptic nature of it
how it tells a continuing story
my favorite line was
"As she grows
I wish to show her someday.
How little kiddies
should really play....."
it gives the poem a sort of timeless thing....what i mean is if this poem were really old then you can still consider the idea of continued generations....like the story never ends....
good job!
-jessi
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Thank you very much.
I am glad you liked it.
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What a creepy poem...
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from a creepy mind....yes yes that seems to fit the bill! thanks for reading!
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wow this poem is awesome...
i just love it.
such sadistic minds... hehe... -
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hehe.
Yes yes.
But you gotta admit ya love it ^^
thanks for reading!
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HA!
BRILLIANT!
Wow.....
this was fuckin eery and twisted as hell.....
i'm very amazed at the sadistic nature of this piece,
as well.....
as the continuation of the killing cycle
ha,
kudos and thanks for your entry!
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Ahh, yes, I worry sometimes at how much fun I have writing these things!
I love the contest, and thanks for reading!
Have tons of fun bathing in the bloodbath you call a contest >)
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I definitely love this poem. It's so...I don't know how to describe it...I love this poem
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thankies ^^
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