Falling into a black hole of despair
Willing away something that isnt really there
Fearing everything that is unknown
Can't ever let that fear show
Voices scream at me to just give in
But I've come to far to just let them win
Insanity taking over my mind
My heart and soul slowly dying
Living life as one big lie
Yet i still find the strength
To be afraid to die
Author notes
This was inspired by both Whisper and Tourniquet by Evanescence
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sj6fKvVSfq8 (whisper)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DyQBEWbEcjk(Tourniquet)
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Comments
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There's a lot of good emotion in this, and I like the inspiration from the songs. I didn't really like the rhyming in this, but overall its a good write. Thanks for entering!
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Dark!
The one fear that can't be shaken off. Impressively dark, kind poet. Keep your pen to the page and thanks for entering -
So sad, and so well expressed. Congratulations on your Bronze.
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an interesting take on the song thanks for entering
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i like this poem so much feeling
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I think we've all been in this situation, but I like how your title and partts of the poem try to see things in a positive way.
Willing away something that isnt really there
Fearing everything that is unknown
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Thank you for entering
This is a well written piece.
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I can so relate to your sad write. I too am afraid of everything I don't even go outside unless my husband is by my side and then I still have panick attacks. No we can't let the voices and the past demons win! Amazing imagery and emotion
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I can really relate to this and how I have felt in my deepest moments of despair. This is very well written and describes some of the feelings very articulately. I know it is a struggle sometimes. It is for many of us, but like you said;
"Voices scream at me to just give in
But I've come to far to just let them win
Voices scream at me to just give in
But I've come to far to just let them win"
That is just it; we can't let them win!
Also, I know how it feels to see life as a lie, because I have been there many times myself. You are not alone!
Karen 
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this was really good. i love the second stanza, i seriously think it was amazing. i can relate.
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I think that this was amazing! I loved this! You have talent, so keep it up!
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i think this is lovely emotional piece of writitng, keep it up, you have talent!
stephanie =)
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