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It's a Long, Long Time

It's been a long, long time
You were always on my mind
Never thought it would go the way it did
For every season that's turned
For all the bridges that we burned
It's about time that we got back off the skids

For no matter how it goes
There are always to's and fro's
On the road that we must travel or get left behind
We can talk until we're black and blue
About the troubles we all go through
Or stand up and be counted every time

There are places filled with gold
So much treasure more than we can hold
And the good news is within everybody's reach
It's written in every holy book
Don't be shy just take a look
For every prophet's wisdom is in there just to teach

It's been a long, long haul
Like the travels of Saint Paul
These journeys take their place in each and every heart
So be gentle and be kind
You never know what you might find
We are all each a small beginning of the total part

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  • Breezie
    April 29, 2008

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    This is beautiful!!! I love it! I love the theme, and the imagery, and it has a really nice flow to it! Great job!! And best of luck in the contest!


  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 21, 2008

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    Thank you, I appreciate this entry, however, in consideration of the contest - I needed to know what form you wrote this one inlol


  • Patched Up Ragdoll
    April 8, 2008
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    WOnderfully written! Great job! Brava!


  • Nikki Rowles
    March 13, 2008
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    Your Score

    Title: 6
    Wow: 8
    Flow: 4
    Read:4
    Total: 22

  • Nikki Rowles
    March 13, 2008

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    This is a good write, I see what you mean about having to push on to a better place in this world, good write, (I know I repeat myself) Good luck and I will keep you updated


  • crystallynnbradford
    March 10, 2008

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    i am very impressed with your use of rhythm and rhyme scheme....this is the first "hope" category poem I have read so far in the contest and it is quite impressive....thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Dave Powell
    March 7, 2008

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    This poem had a very methodical rhythm to it, one that was very enjoyable. The message was clear and unwavering, as well. I thought that in places it felt like it was preaching, but only in a few places. Overall, it was a very nicely done poem. I especially liked:

    "It's been a long, long haul
    Like the travels of Saint Paul
    These journeys take their place in each and every heart
    So be gentle and be kind
    You never know what you might find
    We are all each a small beginning of the total part"

    What a wonderful stanza to end the poem. Well said. Thanks for sharing this poem and good luck in the contest!

  • piccola silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    I always enjoy this style of rhyme because it is hard for me to master. This was great and it had a message too. Don't you just love the poetry of Frost? He is the favorite of many.


  • poetryality silver member
    February 19, 2008

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    A stellar message of Hope and Unity poet. This poem left me feeling like; what's the use in complaining if I'm not taking action to remedy a situation? Very poignant work here. I wish you the best in the challenge.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


  • islekine gold member
    February 18, 2008
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    Other than the typos...already pointed out...

    This is a great write!
    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • Michael-B
    February 18, 2008

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    Very nice poem, i really like the lines in the first stanza,

    Never thought it would go the way it did
    For every season that's turned
    For all the bridges that we burned
    It's about time that we got back off the skids

    Seems so true in most relationships that fail. just a few typo's in line 8 (aloways = always) and in line 22 you repeated the word be (be be kind). other than that i think its a great write good luck in the contest.

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