5 minutes from death
i look down at the puddle of blood
seeing in shades of black, white, and gray
the tourniquet on my arm no longer makes it throbs with loss of circulation
i feel is the life draining from my body
my mind rushes
i feel dizzy
room spinning
lights flashing
no body control
i couldnt scream even if i wanted to be saved
even if i did no one could save me
to close to death
this is what i wanted
to feel
the pain of almost being dead
so i would know for a few minutes
that at one point i was once alive because i knew to die you had to live
a sense of self satisfaction
will power
dont miss me
Author notes
I am not going to kill myself, its just the thought of it
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sad
suicide its so sad so many people do it though this peom describes it really well and its sad that people have to go that far just to know pain
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thanks
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Wow I can really relate to this poem..I could def feel the emotions in this.
Good job <3
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thankx!
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That was really good, really touching and really.... real. yeah....
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aww youll get there
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i like it vary much wish i could feel this...*sighs*
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i like this poems because it pulls me in
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Great
I went through a little bit of that and that's a great write. well penned =] keep it up
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I'm glad killing yourself is a part of you past instead of your future. It is an interesting thing to think about. Great write, and take care babe.
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. . . cool
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Expressive
I can relate on so many levels to this poem, I really enjoyed it and you should definately keep writing!!!
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aww thanx!
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great poem
glad you dident actuly do it
well written
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yeah lol, and thanx!
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you are a brilliant poet..oh i know this feeling, this emotion so well..thank you for this..it helps me, because im still dealing w/ all of this..much love to u<3
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thx!!!!! i apprectate u reading this!
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Perfectly Expressed~
I can understand what you're saying here..sometimes in life, we feel so numb, we feel we don't even exist..but to have a rush of blood pouring from your body, you could actually notice it was your own.. therefore you feel in that moment, even though in pain, you feel alive. Please never act on this. But again, the thought, I know well. Thanks for sharing here, and hang in there.
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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thanx sooo much, i really appreciate it, and no i am not planing on doing anything drastic thats in the past for me now, i was just thinkin about it
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well sweetie happy to know your not going to do it though the thought is not any better you know!
but you did lay it out good the poem its self was great, and its pretty true the way you say; just to feel you were once alive and all i so have an idea of what you were saying there very good work sweetie take care and love lots...
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thanx for reading it, i reall appricate wat you have to say
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very good poetry.
not all of us were made to write happy poems.
good job.
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thanx!!! yeah i hv major issues writing happy stuff, i just cant :/ idk y
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This was very expressive and well written. I love it. Good job.
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thanx!!!!
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