I wake up with eyes blind to what is right for me.
I choose to do the easiest thing I can,
so I don't have to put my nose out of line
to please the people I ought to please.
I choose the easiest way,
the path of least resistance;
so that I do not risk the fall
when I fail after I have given all.
I try not to be hard to please...
I do not wish never to be happy.
I'd like to enjoy what life gives,
because it has already taken far too much away.
So I do not demand,
or beg,
or pray.
I try to take all I can,
store it up for the days ahead
when anything could make me smile.
I clutch to hope now that I've found it,
this sweet remedy to life,
the one gift it gave me in return for a friend.
"Don't cry because it's over-smile because it happened"
They say I'll hurt myself doing this...
but at least this way I'm just delaying the inevitable.
I'll live from day to day,
and be glad for that day.
Life will kick me in the teeth again...
but that's a burden for tomorrow.
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yes Im with Gray I am afriad this does need work, but I can see where you are going and the emotion in this is very visable.. x
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Needs work
I feel the emotion in this piece, but there seems to be a lack of rhythm and cadence. A little work should make it a better read.
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evrything going in the ways of vain,
all alone different paths, all along the the thorns of fall
nicer work
but the words were too off.
anyway, a better idea to write
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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i feel like it needs metafores... something like that. it feels too direct to me....
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I like this. There's a lot of thought behind it. This is really filled with emotions. It's sad but yet there's hope in it. Good job.
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I like the rhythm and the message of this. A very nice ending.
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this was a very good write, the rythm was a bit off, i couldnt seem to find a constant, however, the feeling behind was deep and strong which is always nessisary for a good poem. ^-^
good job!
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