Tell me you love me like the moon loves the stars,
[Swear not by the moon, the inconstant moon… ♥]
That you’ll never give me anything but love and respect,
[It’s ok, I can handle the bruises and abuse too…]
That when we’re together, you still feel the same as you did the first time,
[I-I think… I love you…]
That every moment we spend means the world,
[Hey Cat? Shut up.]
Tell me while you’re holding me so close I can hear your heartbeart, tell me that you’re mine and I’m yours and we always will be, forever and forever and forever, and for a thousand and one eternities because I don’t think I can live without your special kind of [love.hate] for any longer than I already did…
So babe
[Sweets, cutie, sexyboy, hun, darling, love, babydoll, beautiful, charmer, sweetie, sugar…]
Please let me know this is right,
[Again.]
Because by the time take 2 rolls around,
The actors are already tired.
[And jaded.]
I need a little more than apathy&arguments…
Author notes
Written 18.2.08
Option 1. -Shit, I have to say sorry for another one of your mistakes...
A contest entry
- She Sits On The Underside Of The Umbrella In The Pouring Rain. by LucyLightning.
450 points, ended February 21, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"Swear not by the moon, the inconstant moon" that's from Romeo and Juliet, correct? If so, then i loved how you used it. =] Such a Beautifully written piece, it had a very nice flow to it. Excellent write.
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Quite right, it is Romeo & Juliet
Thanks hun
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I know exactly how this feels... so much so its inspired me to write about my experiences, so thanks for that. I think I need to anyway, get into detail and let my emotions out, because I keep them bottled a lot. I LOVE this piece, it really hits home and I really love it. Thanks for sharing, well done on the bronze it's my favourite! x
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loveeeeeeeeeeeeeee.
beautiful.
wonderful.
i love it.
finalist.
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