The Difference by SerenityNChains at All poetry

The Difference

I am not sure of when
nor the how or why of it
yet; it is there, within me

your presence is heavy
gravitational, pulling at me
and the softest, even accidental
touch
of your skin to mine
and I am left with nothing to do
but sigh

your eyes haunt
the very core of me
my marrow, my blood, my soul
so much so that...

my eyes tear up
when you cry

and I cannot dream

till you sleep

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Love by Yumi. 600 points, ended March 27, 2008, 8 entries
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Yumi
March 20, 2008

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This is astonishing. I can feel your love bounce off of your words. This is a truly heartfelt and meaningful poem. Keep up the GREAT work and good luck.

Erica ^.^
ears2hearyou
March 6, 2008

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I really enjoyed this poem
as if we were sitting with you and you were secretly
sharing your thoughts with us...I truly enjoyed the
whole poem...love is a beautiful feast, and you sure
did it justice in this smartly written poem!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )))))))))))
x-Black-Butterfly-x
February 27, 2008

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wow this is a pure and powerful write displaying deep and strong empotions within them well done and keep writing
songstress80
February 26, 2008

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excellent
purely a very excellent write...very strong emotions of love and a bit of sadness...i understand the feelings of all that is in this poem...i'm glad i found this write of yours...very well done!
ears2hearyou
February 24, 2008
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loveliest of poems!
and I cannot dream
till you sleep....

that was so lovely to enjoy..wonderful flawless smooth
poem that was to devour and bask in!
Thankyou for writing such a lovely piece to fill our
hearts!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) beautiful soul you have!
PerfectImperfection
February 24, 2008

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Oh I love this, such a very tender piece of everlasting affections pertaining to the core of the heart. Once you become a part of someone in such a way, it is an intensity beyond reason, or even comprehension. Very well composed piece of emotion. Beautiful, truly!
motel
February 23, 2008

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the beauty & depth of this poem is great...& it is raw, with such an open heart. great imagery. thanks.
- SerenityNChains
  February 23, 2008
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  No...thank you for such wonderful comment. I do so appreciate the kind words.
  
  Blessed be,
  Billie Jean
Tam
February 23, 2008

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damn...
this is EXCELLENT poetry pretty lady...

and I cannot dream
till you sleep

WHAT a stunning final line...this is wonderful...
simple and divine in every aspect...
YOU ROCK...
love it!
Blessings! Tammy
- SerenityNChains
  February 23, 2008
  
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  Your comments give me hope to someday be a real writer
  Thank you so much fpr all your encouragement. Hugs hun, love and light always.
  
  Blessed be,
  Billie Jean
CaliOkie
February 18, 2008

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Breathless
That is just perfection. What a beautiful poem full of longing and a deep and abiding love.

"my eyes tear up
when you cry

and I cannot dream
till you sleep."

The whole poem builds to that end and that is when the tears well up and the words go out of focus. The depth of passion and emotion in this is overwhelming.

Awestruck, I reel from this poems' simplicity and impact and it is so beautiful. So well crafted. No excess words, just a concise build up to the finish and you resolve it so well. Perfect.

It may not be in a contest, but it is a winner in my book!

CaliOkie
CaliOkie
February 18, 2008
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Breathless
Poetic Tasha
February 18, 2008

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Sigh...
I want this...
enjoy every moment of it
this is amazing, not that i am surprised, your words always leave me wanting something more [from life ]

thank you for sharing, I am blessed to read your words.

Tasha