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A Scottish Lass

This lass borne in da Scottish hills
Wit pipes a blowin given thrills
A’dinnie kin how it all came to be
To see the pipers call.

Wit skirts a flairin to ‘n fro
‘n dancin so me legs’ll show
The music makes me heart race in the night
The sight of flowing lace.

A ba-haid lad came on to me
And said there’s somethin I should see
A tadger under kilt it was his lil trick
I kick him in the baws!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Scottish Vernaculars:
A'dinnie ken -  I don t know
Ba-heid - Similar in meaning to Heid-the ba. One with an over-inflated opinion of their own importance.
Baws - Testicles See also: Hawmaws
Tadger - a semi-soft penis

 

Byr a thoddaid: (bir a thod-deyed):

This Celtic form consists of any number of quatrain stanzas. Each stanza combines one couplet of eight syllable lines a. a. and one couplet where the first line has ten syllables and the second line has six syllables, This couplet is called a toddaid byr.

There is no set order for the couplets.

In the ten syllable line the main rhyme b. b. is found before the end of the line and the last syllable of that line links the six syllable line by alliteration, assonance or secondary rhyme. Here is the form layout for either variation.

x x x x x x x a
x x x x x x x a
x x x x x x b x x c.
x c x x x b

or

x x x x x x d x x e.
x e x x x d
x x x x x x x f
x x x x x x x f

 

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  • majorpaul silver member
    November 17
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    Slainte!

    You are much prettier than Robert Burns, but you are very much in tune with his language. Which is gud!
    Dinnie kin should be 2 words, but we could let that slide I suppose.
    Baws needs a ! after it!

  • aychellus gold member
    October 22

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    wow! rabbie burns would be giggling away at this one, delighted to see someone attempting to write in ma hame tongue ye dinneken how guid it mak's me feel am fair tickled so a am , an if ye kin unerston that ye'll ken how guid this poem is !!
    much love looking forward to reading more of your work


  • isabelwk
    April 17, 2008
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    isabelwk

    Interesting! redwingspirit sent me your link.


  • penman gold member
    March 3, 2008
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    Wow!

    This is so amazing. You are so gifted at forms.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    I was so upset when you pulled this out, it made me grin from the first line on. I love your "cheeky" poetry it shows such a joyous side of you that sometimes gets lost. The two poems in this contest from you were delightful and I thank-you deeply for entering them.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Little sister, I am still giggling about this. You surfed along on pure hubris! Wonderful fun.

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