Exquisite pain in
downcast eyes,
harmonious
dissonance.
Loving you
hurts, but
numbness still
means feeling.
Author notes
"The only true love I ever knew was behind those downcast eyes. The only comfort I ever felt was during those long hours of loneliness when I felt for you"- Tuomas Holopainen
In a list
A contest entry
- 15/15/15 QUICKIE by Nighttime angel.
415 points, ended February 17, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is wonderful, you gave that picture quite a story, congrats on the silver.
♥
whisper
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aw wow this is so beautiful and sorrowful. Fantastic little piece and you definitely deserved a trophy for this and you got it! Congrats!
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wow
such power squeezed into such a small space. this poem triggered a sort of atomic bomb of emotions and thoughts in my head. my best friend killed himself this past december, and it rekindled that fire. you are definitely right numbness does still mean that there is feeling. an absoloutely wonderful write. if you dont mind i would like to add this to my ever growing list of favorite poems that i keep on my page. please let me know if that's okay with you.
Rob -
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No problem... Just make sure to credit me if you do
thanks, laura xxx
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Quite wise actually...those last couple lines especially. And so it does, numbness means feeling I mean, and without the hurt, we'd never appreciate the good...still I've had my share of the hurt to last a lifetime.
Congrats on the silver.
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Great job with the silver cup. much deserved. This was a great, dark piece with a beautiful vocabulary!
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Congrats on the silver trophy lovely. First let me say that you could have chosen a better quote. Who better to help your inspiration than the beautiful Tuomas. Anyway... this was really amazing, the depth and sadness was so strong and overwhelming, it was very real to read these words. Well done.
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"Exquisite pain" = beautiful
Congrats on the silver.
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Wow hun congrats on the silver, very well done this was a great piece here!
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congrats
on the silver trophy!
I knew this was destined for jewelry...
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Very sharp image etched in your words. I loved the flow and creativity of this piece. I think that we all have experienced the longing to feel something, even if the numbness of fleeting pain. Inside, everything seems dead. The loneliness cries out for confirmation that the body is just a little more ... than a hollow shell. Beautiful take on the prompt and best wishes in the comp
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wow I do not like the dark picture thats just me the poem is beautiful
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Your last stanza is just pure brilliance!!! I love it!! Well done and best of luck in the contest!!
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Great job on this. Nice take on the prompt and best of luck in the contest!!
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Wow, very intense and filled
with emotion. Well done, I really
enjoyed reading this piece! Great
imagery as well. All the best to you
in this contest and keep up the
wonderful work here!
Jeremy0826
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oh dear...
this is INTENSE...
what a deep write in only fifteen words...
very well done indeed!
good luck in the contest...
Blessings! Tammy
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my, oh my. this is so very true, its scary. I have felt this way at one time or another in my life. you did an outstanding job with this prompt.
I love the last stanza, its the part that stood out to me the most.
excellent write, good luck
kat
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