fingers graze
the silence of ripples
passing by
my blurring reflection.
where do i
want to be?
where do i
cease to breathe?
a constant revision
of old thoughts
and quiet cries.
a question
pause
and slow epiphany.
revisit
the shallow water
and ask
what's wrong..
flick a rock
off into the deep.
was it fate
or gentle force?
look down at my feet
as the rocks fall back
in place.
it is here i leave.
withdrawn to a world
they cannot trace.
Author notes
i guess this is about my indecision with things. being a youth, and wanting to withdraw from the places that leave me uneasy.
A contest entry
- immeasurable. by girl shaman.
1150 points, ended February 24, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Be Original, more points to come by katie-jo.
700 points, ended March 15, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful.
Absolutely perfectly well done, you have asked great questions and your thoughts are conveyed excellently.
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest. -
very well done.
good questions asked here too
i really see no suggestions to give; and i feel the title was perfect
thank you for entering
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amazing flow i must say,
i liked this poem as well
i must say you are a very talented poet!
i wish you all the best in the contest
and give you lots of love,
endless-lover
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