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Forgotten Juliet (B I)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 her heart shows
 transparent realties,
 where emotions
 have stretched thin-
 like butter
 on too much bread.
 there is not enough
 to pass around.

 and hands construct

 origami leaves,
 stained with paper cuts;
 to let them fall
 one by one,
 only to be crushed
 under blackened boots.

 she disconnects herself,
 cell by broken cell;
 unraveling the threads
 that society frayed.

 and lets herself drift
 into gasoline stained breezes;
 her body droops

 into those delicate
 three leaf clovers
 that turn to ash.





























































 

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  • legendd
    February 28

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    gorgeous write...i cannot see the picture because my school blocks everything...but i can see it in my mind. great write.
    legendd

  • Elfin silver member
    February 18
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    Well done, this is lovely.Good luck in the contest. Val

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 18

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    Oh This is beautiful we both did the same prompt it is neat to see it from different views much love


  • And Hyetal
    February 18

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    Flow 1 point
    Word Choice 1 point
    Take on prompt 1 point
    Overall appeal 1 point

    Wow on imagery, wow on flow, wow on theme, wow on take of prompt, wow on EVERYTHING!!!

    You...
    are...
    invincible...

    for now



    4 points for Team Ink!

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    ~Cassie


  • Naridill gold member
    February 17
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    Ca-Chigga


  • Ryno
    February 17

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    Another strong one you've penned. The imagery is this is describes emotion & connects to the reader well threw the imagery. Some great phrasing.

    Keep up the amazing work. Good luck in the contest! Ryan

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