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it's lust not love & the hell of it




it’s a powerful,
powerful thing
this pull I feel
for you

a torturous pleasure,
swollen with thought
& laced with lust

to know
our twisted orbits
will never cross,
that your hands
will never place mine
over you
is a horrible
kind of hell





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  • Dark Otter
    February 18, 2008

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    Good

    Nice twist, unresolved lust or desire. A torturous pleasure swollen with thought. Nice play on words. I liked the style. Made me fantasize. So, thumbs up


  • Devils Reject
    February 18, 2008
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    Very nice piece you penned here


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    Certainly a different write for you, but I like the brevity of the lines, the flow and the message you share in these lines. Does sound like a kind of hell though to only have thoughts and know they will not be acted upon.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    No need of an explanation...the emotion seeps from this piece. Thanks for entering and good luck in the judging. Laura x