I think the recycled atmospheres of passenger plane cabins
serve to numb our olfactory palates
on trips home.
In four hours I forgot the smell of Hollywood;
had it washed from my clothes
in dry cold breezes of pressurized oxygen.
The airport in Omaha was the sweat and perfume
that permeates all airports, but
when the revolving exit thrust me into
the warm humid wrappings of tornado alley summer,
I lost myself in indulgent lungfuls
of toasty alfalfa and hot distant manure.
A contest entry
- involuntary memory by Dienush.
600 points, ended February 27, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive critique always welcome
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holy shit. i love your descriptions. ive been to Omaha several times, and i go to ucla, so im near hollywood!
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I can relate to this poem
I loved it!
I guess I feel the same way about my home country and the country where I currently reside. Thank you for sharing this! I haven't read a poem such as this in a very long time!
Keep writing and take care!
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I really like how you presented this poem... so realistically. Also, the way you applied smells to depict how you feel is very good. Thanks for your entry
~Diana
p.s sorry 'bout the welcome. Occupational habit
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Never been to either place but your few words still produced a reaction to place and time that I could almost touch. thanks for the ride.
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well I liked it because it is so uniuqe. really has its own voice and tone. very well done I must say.
Keep penning,
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It just goes to show you hollywood are not you still have to live in the real world its not so bad a good shower a wee drink and your human again
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Very good.
I like the way you have used the senses to contrast different areas of the country. I can also see that the change that occurs when you leave one area is not just geographical, but that you, too, have changed, and are more in touch with nature and "your" true nature. Less shallow and selfish, more down to earth and real. At least those are the vibes the poem is giving off.
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I felt the ride as each word I read..excellant piece!
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Excellent
Most intriguing imagery indeed. Quite well written as usual. Hope all is going well with you.
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