Can I give you all that I am, A love so light and breezy.
For me its not that simple, its just not that easy.
I still hide parts, things you dont know.
There is some shame and guilt, things from long ago.
I cannot tell you these things, this I must forgo.
Like a blanket keeping me safe, I can never ever bestow.
For I have delt with these things and overcome them on my own.
Can I put them in my keep and just leave well enough alone.
I know you would have protected me, but these things made me strong.
Keeping them inside fuels me on no matter how wrong.
We are only as sick as our secrets I once heard.
But I dont see it as sickness, that statements a little blurred.
Giving up every part, exposing myself to you.
Would you hurt me with it if we were ever through.
I could never give somone that power over me.
I wish you could understand, I wish you could see.
I will never hurt you, I would never leave.
Dont ask so much, just let me breath.
You keep secrets too, dont lie I know you do.
Were doing more than fine stay out of my keep.
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Comments
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I cannot tell you these thing, this I must forgo.--isnt it supposed to be things !
PLEASE GO READ RULES !!!
allover i like it..i lie how the flow has gone throughout !
good luck in LIFE!
anagh -
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I edited the error. In life there will always be mistakes. Perfection is boring. Like in your comment. (I lie the flow) is this supposed to read "like" this or is it a mistake? Thanks for the comment.
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Loved this; not all secrets can be told not even to those closest to us great job!
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A nicely written piece. I can fully understand the meanings here and I am sure some will be able to relate. Very well penned, good luck in the contest
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This is really good. I understand how telling your worst secrets would give him leverage that you don't wish him to have. Thanks for entering my contest and I wish you much luck.
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I love the last stanza... I think that it was your best:
I will never hurt you, I would never leave.
Dont ask so much, just let me breath.
You keep secrets too, dont lie I know you do.
Were doing more than fine stay out of my keep.
Great ryhme and diction.
Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck,
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Not exactly what I was looking for, but since I screwed up the contest and I like it it doesn't matter.
I like the rhymeing, you pulled it off
Great poem -
i really like this and i know
what you mean when you say your secrets
fuel you and make you stronger
i dont tell boyfriends about
my deep down secrets
i could never trust them with that either
i show my secrets in poems on here
that works for me
i really like this
great write
thanx for entering
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