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Seeing Red

I'm dropping beats
and losing tunes,
he's digging graves
and casting tombs.

He's unaware
he's dug his own,
as he shovels down
to the unknown.

I'm singing prose
and breaking hearts,
he's breathing hard
after my head start.

He'll bring those pills
he offered me,
and hum our song
while he bleeds.

I'm seeing red
and feeling blue,
he's acting brave
as he subdues.




TO BE CONTINUED!
help me!!!
you need to tell me what I should make the next parrttt!!!!

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 18, 2008

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    wow, to be honest with you i have no clue where you should go with this, i mean it is good but it is something that is kind of hard to continue, keep it flowing