Last night;
she fell to pieces
Body and soul-
as bruised as the room
Resting to restore her sanity,
no longer hiding behind her vanity
Her vulnerability has been exposed
As she learns to savor her solitude
she is starting over -
without you...
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Author notes
Picture Prompt/ 10 Lines ~ Art was provided for contest, artist unknown...
A contest entry
- 19th Contest by Spiritualangel PIF.. 10x10..Picture Prompt by spiritualangel.
300 points, ended February 21, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love that last few lines!!!!!!!! You penned a lovely one here!!!!!!
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Body and soul-
as bruised as the room
Resting to restore her sanity,
no longer hiding behind her vanity
Beautiful. Best of Luck. -
"Last night;
she fell to pieces
Body and soul-
as bruised as the room",...love those lines....
I am going through something similar at the moment...this is excellent...I like 'learning to savor solitude' too...
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Very interesting interpretation of that picture. I like the originality as much as the flow. Nicely done.
John
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I can feel this one on a deep level ... gathering one's strength to pick up the pieces and start over. Great write! Best of luck in the contest.
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very interesting take on the prompt!!! I really liked this. Your thoughts on this were on the opposite take of mine. Very well done and best of luck....
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Wow
Excellent write!! I enjoyed every part of this poem.
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"As she learns to savor her solitude
she is starting over --
without you... " these are brilliant lines i love them sanity and vanity dont really go in my compinion they dont sound right together other than that excellent work.
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ah yes without you great ending thanks for sharing regards zaj
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Potent Verse~
Thanks for sharing,
a very wonderfully worded piece,
lots of imagery, and penned with excellence.
All the best within the contest friend.
-Timothy
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