Night brings a glistened shine
streets aglow in amber stares
shards of daytime indifference
give glassy dazzle and gleam, empty
dark alleys loom, music from many places
deep thumping beats setting off alarms, and
alarming sirens fade unfazingly
into undulating tides, sounds of city night;
walking the dark streets,
crack of gunfire, in shadows
men seeking crack, ignored pavement
cracks frequently finding ignorant toes.
Freedom in the yellow haze
loud laughter and litter;
noting time on the billboard screen
and pushy tomorrow.
Author notes
Option 6] Urbanized
A contest entry
- 10 entries. 10-20 lines. Prompts. by Tangled Angle.
450 points, ended February 18, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Streets aglo in amber stares... wow. that painted the scenery for this whole poem! I loved the poem.
All the best
Lovies
Becks
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9.0
Strong imagery, but I think there were a lot of commas...could have been better without them. Besides that, I thought you did a great job.
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good editorial point on the commas...thanks...'skid
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Just walkin' can certainly allow on to see lots of stuff, no matter where they travel. Interesting journey you have taken us on.
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Liked the thoughtfulness of this, you've captured city life well through your descriptives.Well done.Best of luck in the contest
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