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Ritual Remembrances (Pt 1)

The pull invites the red smear marriage
then the pushing is granted safe passage;
  morbid decay cortex cells corrode
headless horseman pulls an empty carriage.

Frosted pale vision beneath anguished sky
streamlined thoughts glide easily in a sigh;
  fountains of youth pour reflections overflowed
tethered to forgotten smiles gone awry.






Author notes

PROMPT PICTURE #1 http://www.deviantart.com/print/2322991/
The music nature by *Ethernity

50 WORDS
... the poem is about intravenous drug abuse memories. The first line is the drawing up and mixing of the blood (and drug) in the syringe, the second line is about pushing it in.

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  • PerfectImperfection
    March 9, 2008

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    This has some great lines to add to such intensity... Such a diverse interpretation to the image. Creative and well penned. Thanks for the entry!

  • Uniquely-Scarred
    March 5, 2008

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    deep little methorical write we have here, im assuming you know only to well what this is about, i have an idea, having been here once

    . Rewarded 4


  • yourhot21
    March 4, 2008

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    This poem is very confusing, but it's very deep too. It makes me want to read it until I understand it! Great write.

    . Rewarded 4

  • JWGoethe
    March 4, 2008

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    words as symbols, not creating sentences but flowing images that collide in jumbled dark profusion. I dig it!
  • eshammett
    February 23, 2008
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    I immediately wanted to read it again, love the way you invoke deep thought. great read!

  • Harmesmur
    February 23, 2008
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    interesting imagery. I confuses me, but that makes me read it again. I like it, good job

  • exceptforthis
    February 22, 2008

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    well done! very dark, kind of reminds me of Sleepy Hollow. so many words rich in meaning. "morbid decay cortex cells corrode" was really interesting, packed with images. great job!
  • LovesStrength
    February 17, 2008

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    What a way to take this one. Well done and best wishes to you in this contest. Seeing many great pieces here.

    LS

  • Gods-Artgal
    February 17, 2008
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    This is a great poem.
    You are a great poet.


  • Talking Toni gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    This Is Full..............

    of brilliant imagery and the use of vocbulary is incedible!!! Hats off to you!!! Thanks for shairng your talent!!!~~Toni~~

    . Rewarded 4


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    What an unusual picture you have for incentive for this poem. Creative alliteration in these lines, good flow, rhythm and rhyme. Looks like you have tried to get everything into these lines.

    . Rewarded 4

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