On the walls?
Painted in the air.
The mantle laps but who can drink that much?
I watched her walk as he did, and my gifts she did adore
but can she love theirs more? I'll smother her.
That's my last Duchess on the wall. See the splatter?
See the blood? Those are her hands.
That's my last Duchess; her cheeks do blush.
The blood makes her smile
as it makes me smile.
My last Duchess rests her hands upon her lap.
A picture of obedience;
a picture.
Now finally I can trust that
she shall never love another.
Author notes
For Robert Browning
Picture (1)
A contest entry
- Poets Survivor 3 - Preliminary Round #1 - Invite Only by Ryno.
625 points, ended February 22, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Please don't be despaired; would like to see you next season.
Thank-you. 
Ryan -
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I found this piece to be interesting & creative, but like the other judges I was continously look for more in it ~ more deepness maybe, more soul into it, if you know what I mean ~ though, I still enjoyed the piece -
yes, I found this creative and captivating although I did wish I had more, but if you leave them wanting more is a very good sign
Good luck
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This is chilling, and so creative! I am intrigued, I will have to go read the Browning poem now. My favorite part, "My last Duchess rests her hands upon her lap.
A picture of obedience;
a picture." A great read!
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Try The Laboratory; also by Robert Browning.
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You should read it. He is a genius. It takes a bit of enterpretation mind.
Thanks! My favourite few lines of this poem are actually:
"I watched her walk as he did, and my gifts she did adore//
but can she love theirs more? I'll smother her."
I just love the way I have slight rhyme with such an abrupt end to that line.
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I really liked your idea here. I love Browning, and I think it was very creative to play off of his poem! I would have liked to have seen you take this a step further, explore the idea a bit more--bring in a bit more depth, maybe.
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nice eng lit really is inspiring you lately isn't it? lol
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This is beautiful, Heather! I've been a fan of yours, ever since you participated in my poetic challenge, and I have to say that this piece gave me the absolute chills! Well done, and good luck to you, my friend!
Laura
xxx
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I thought I recognised he name of this poem. And this is a great reply to it. Welldone and good luck in the contest.
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