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Step Into My Mind

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Allow the moments

to linger, in this ageless

passionate inner-verse

 

that is my soul, older

than the very thought

of time itself

 

and quietly, I humbly saunter  

through this existence

to gather

 

meaningful, little bits of

who I am supposed to be,

in hopes of creating

 

a whole, beautiful visage

to leave behind before

I depart again.

A contest entry

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  • Heartless Angel
    March 4, 2008

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    I am in love with the language of this poem. You have a definate talent with words. I love the imagery, and the line "that is my soul, older

    than the very thought

    of time itself"
    is a poem in it of itself. Congratulations on the win. A wonderful poem, with wonderful language!

    Sincerely,
    Lillian Madeline


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 4, 2008

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    Good Morning and Congratulations on winning the Bronze Mike. Your poem is full of wonderful inmagery. A pleasure to read and well deserving to be a winner. Bless you. Sandy


  • AngelEyes13
    March 3, 2008

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    Wow, I am completely at a lose for words. This was absolutly wonderful. Thanks so much for entering my contest!


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    February 24, 2008

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    beautiful

    I can't imagine anyone writing this better or writing a better poem to this prompt.
    I love the gentle ebb and flow fo the words and the delicate imagery.
    The soul is beautiful and amazing - you are amazing.

  • Bjarne gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    FIlled up the Iris

    Well, you certainly have not left any room to work around your "take"!

    You have presented a very strong entry and most of all, you have given a perspective to us:

    "...a whole, beautiful visage
    to leave behind before
    I depart again."

    Amen!

    Thanks for sharing!
    I concede before a drop of ink hits the page! Best wishes.

    bjarne

  • ashjoe76
    February 17, 2008

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    You are very serious about the business of living, eh? All the moments of life matter a lot, and much more than all that, our perceptions of them matter. A very good poem, MIke. Congrats and Best Regards!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    Stunning!! We all hope to gather bits that will leave us a whole beautiful person. Something I strive for in my life also...

    You have such a way with words hun that is washes over you and feels like a warm embrace!!


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    February 17, 2008

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    You have th eyes, the window to the soul written so well within your WORDS

    Meaningful little bits of who I am supposed to be. WOW


    Deep writing, expressive, I liked MJ


    Cindy


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    Your soul is filled with beauty and passion, sweetheart, just as your words are. You reach out and touch me and I fear I will never be the same person again for knowing you.

    Love and peace to you, my sweet
    Margaret

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