Escape.
I have this life,
occasionally feeling
‘cabin fever, syndrome’.
Locked away, my bedroom,
my space.
The world living without
My outside, presence
present.
Light creeps through the cracks in the blind…
My eyes,
tempted,
curious.
I Break out
Adore the sun, beach.
Flirtation with water;
feet in softest sand.
Animals, my friends
Run, so peaceful,
so jubilantly
venturous.
Today,
even a stroll,
mind and body rested.
Home again
However, soul is
liberated.
In a list
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Comments
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An excellent composition---very well versed with perfect flow!
Well Done!!
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i like the way you use escape and tell about being locked up and then breaking free, good job with this poem, keep writing, -Amy
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Thank you, I will
Cindy
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Man I am soooo there!!! I feel ya sis... damn I gotta get outside more!! lol
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I know exactly what you are expressing in this piece. That first stanza hit all too close to home for me. You really expressed yourself well in this piece, thank you for the read... I especially enjoyed the word choice.
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I felt this was one others might be able to connect with thinking thats me in a nut shell hahahaha...
But it is me in a nutshell too lol
Making myself get out of the house more & it feels sooo goood
Thanks for a lovely comment darl
Cin
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Yes, walking can be an invigorating act... so too can be allowing yourself to breathe in the beauty nature has to offer. I can relate to this piece... its meaningful content alot. A good piece!
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I love to breath the beauty of nature, love it. Glad you could relate, very glad
Thank you
Cindy
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its great to escape from time to time and your escape was breathtaking good job
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Thank you
Cindy
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It's important to note that not all animals are your friend. Hug a jellyfish and you'll see what I mean.
It's difficult not to stay locked up in your cave. You get out there and it can be a really nice experience. It's easier to stay cooped up though. I feel the same way about exercise as well. When I do it it's great. Usually, instead I think about everything involved, and curl up into the fetal position. -
Great write Cindi, love the way you have used the simple pleasurses, such as the beach and animals , to uplift you and bring you back into the real world.....welcome
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Escape. escape
Can't count the number of times, i thought about that! You have written a piece that resonates with alot of people especially myself. thanks for the momentary trip
you took me on!
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Wow....this is absolutley amazing! I have felt similar before in my life, great job and great write! -Liz
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"I have this life,
occasionally feeling
‘cabin fever, syndrome’.
Locked away, my bedroom,
my space."
I too have felt this way...many times. I think you described it very well...as well as how you get away from it to find some freedom from it.
lovely.
Cheers,
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"I have this life,
occasionally feeling
‘cabin fever, syndrome’.
Locked away, my bedroom,
my space."
Yes, I feel this way at times myself. A lovely heart's labor dear Cindy.
Love and peace,
mj.
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a really good write here. great words used and a great way to describe escape. its nice to get away from things once in a while.well done!
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Thank you kindly
Cindy
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Excellent Poem
This is an excellent poem--Well versed--I liked the 5th stanza in particular! --I have a poem with the same title!!
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Thank you buriedtreasures, much appreciated
Cindy
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Very nicely done briefly and succinct. Working at home with computers these days I'm certain cabin fever will become a leading social disorder in the coming years. I enjoyed your poem. Happy trails
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Thank you for your comment davidwright
Happy trails to you too
Cindy
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WOW!!!!!!!!
Did I write this, or did you? lol You have captured the true POETDONTKNOWIT, in the raw!!!!! I am going crazy, with cabin fever, and the beach, is where I go in my mind, to keep from going insane. I can't believe how you stepped in my head, and withdrew my daily thoughts! MY LONG LOST TWIN!!!!!!!!!
I ADORE THE WRITE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*POETDONTKNOWIT*******************************8
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Well somehow I did, or we are indeed alike..thats all truth lol, my escape, the beach, for real and in my head and dreams lol
Cin
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It is good to break away from the confines of our mind , to escape into the sunlight and re-charge our minds.An excellent poem, Ros
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indeed, thanks Ros
Cindy
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You captured it all so well, I knew exactly what you were saying Baby Girl.
Love you
Mum 
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Glad you know, understand
Thanks Mom
Cin
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