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rêve du passé

Come on! Lets go
what are you waiting for?
I'm still half way in
But my heart is out the door
Hurry! Please
I can't wait anymore
I'm down on my knees
with my head on the floor
Dont look behind you!
Dont look away
If the past comes back to haunt you,
Listen to what it has to say
Run, run
run real fast
Dont stop now, baby
I'm a dream of your past.
Veet! Veet!
get on your feet
walk away while youre in the clear
Allez vien,
the boy did run...
but had no place to go
And despite my fears
Through all these years
he still would love me so

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  • cgirl0410
    February 21, 2008

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    I love the flow in this piece. I can definitely relate to this, as I'm sure so many other could. Very great piece here. I really enjoyed it. - cgirl0410


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 19, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Love this lyrical flow...thanks for sharing!
    Keep up the wonderful works, and pen on poetess!

    -Timothy