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Shattered

I let my heart slip,
It fell into the dust.
Shattered peices scatter to the wind.
An empty place where there once was love.
I let a tear slide down my cheek.
My hands clench.
I begin to shudder.
I was so blind,
To allow him to do this to me.

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  • Megan Awesome
    January 8, 2009
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    Read my rules please


  • Shannon62875
    November 3, 2008

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    wow

    This was a very good write.. Altho it didnt rhyme and really short, i thought it was well written and very emotional... Its amazing how small it can be, but yet so damn strong. You did a great job writing this piece... It was amazing!!!

    Shannon*Leah


  • peregrin
    September 27, 2008
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    Wow, this is great!
    I love it!
    Love!
    It paints pain, loss...
    wow,
    Great work!


  • perfectsunset
    July 2, 2008

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    Wow; so powerful the emotions expressed here and beautifully done.

    Thanks for entering and best of luck


  • XXCrimsonRaineXX
    April 24, 2008

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    wow, this is an amazing write. It's short, but to the point. I really feel like this at the moment, and it really had a lot of meaning for me. Excellent write, and good luck in my contest.

    XXCrimsonRaineXX


  • SchizoChic
    February 28, 2008
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    Very nice. Thanks for entering.


  • nobody knows me
    February 23, 2008
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    Thankyou for entering my contest good luck x


  • N e a r
    February 17, 2008
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    Wow! This is great! "I was so blind, To allow him to do this to me." You gave such profond and deep emotions in this write.. And you were able to write it in a short poem with so much creativity... I like this poem a lot!

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