When peace became a distant memory
and war the constant drumbeat of life
world stood on the edge, so near an abyss
as among sheer walls of unforgiving rock,
And I stood with many others opposed in mind
grim parade before barely believing eyes
for there had always been an intervening hand
dividing right from probable, wrong from day.
But now hand was gone, I'd grown idle
unknowing, my turn fallen across my path.
Hand to turn the sway of ways followed
was mine, blind faith dissolved to resolve.
Time for change, not soft turned palms, questioning
now clenched to fists of will, and moment.
Author notes
unmetered and unrhymed.
A contest entry
- Sonnets with no set meter by masterblaster.
450 points, ended February 20, 2008, 8 entries
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Hi, this is a lovely poem, a pleasure to read, all the best in the contest,Di
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Excellent Poem
This is a really cool poem the way you worded it!Good colors,and back ground!Great piece of work,keep on writing,and using the talent You done a awesome job!Lisa K haslett Raytown Missouri! -
very good sonnet "But now hand was gone" an 'odd' phrase VERY STRONG ENDING the ambiguous position always leads/ushers anyone to disaster thanks for sharing regards zaj
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"Hand to turn the sway of ways followed
was mine, blind faith dissolved to resolve."
This is a powerful write poet, so appropriate for the here and now! There is a time for speaking softly, politely ... standing quietly while others destroy everything we value ... what our ancestors worked so hard to build. There comes a time when people must speak out LOUDLY ... and act. NOW is that time. If not now, when? We have watched the greedy and arrogant lead us down a path of destruction. They don't believe WE count. Time to show them they are wrong.
"Time for change, not soft turned palms, questioning
now clenched to fists of will, and moment."
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Thank you JB
clenched fists and determination, after so many years of leaderless drifting a great nation will have a chance to rise to its potential...thank you for reading and your wonderful, thoughtful comment...PK
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Oh, I don't know about unmetered, there is an internal rhythm to this, intentional or not. Excellent and very thought provoking.
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Very good.Your words set the mind thinking, thankyou, Ros
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This is so very good! The thoughts involved in this poem are things that many of us have in mind. There are times when we need to act instead of just being spectators.
Well used metaphors, very good poem!
Mari
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