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silence ensues

I am sick with sadness.

She said she'd stay
solidly stuck,
solely soul-mated solipsism.
She's said she'd stop stopping.
I am saying
I am sick.
Sadness stays silent.

is it safe?

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  • theworld
    March 22, 2008

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    Powerful. My favorite line: I am saying/I am sick. But why "s"? I might try it out without the last line, or by moving that to an earlier point. It's a little too "end-ish."


  • TheGangstress
    February 18, 2008
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    I'm sick with alliteration. Nice write.


  • WisdomWarrior
    February 17, 2008

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    Spring!! For such a short message on silence this SHOUTS to me. There was so much emotion compacted in this poem. Nice write.

    John