I drift away to dreamland
snuggled down in my bed
visions of oceans' blue
and sand between my toes
I feel the hot sun on my face
skin basking in the glow
it all is so surreal
yet feels like I am there
I think I shall stay awhile
in this mental imagery
Author notes
"SORTED"
A contest entry
- Be my escape by mcw120588.
300 points, ended April 9, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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Great way to describe your dreams- I like the images- it makes the dream seem so real, which of course was part of the topic of the poem. I enjoyed this! Thanks for entering!
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It is pleasant to have pleasant dreams.
A brief but reader-friendly poem.
We all seem to love sand between our toes even when lying between clean sheets.
Thank you for being part of the anthology of this contest.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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Very pleasant read ...
congrats on your trophy.
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Sweet dreams
I like this one because unlike the others there is nothing strange, scary or unsettling about it. Peaceful dreams, how I do cherish them. Thank you for entering!
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i really love the thoughts you have put into this poem i love the detials you have used to describe a wonderful dreamland place, good luck in all the contests and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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Nice images, though I felt you could have went into more detail and imagery instead of just stating what you feel/see. Short but nonetheless good. Thank you for entering, and good luck
Jeanette*~ -
This sounds wonderful, I wish I was there LOL.
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Good...but...
Yeah, the old "but". I like the imagery, though I think it could do with being a little longer or more detailed. Still, I do like it. -
Sounds like a wonderful place to be, I'd stay there a while as well. Beautiful imagery. I really enjoyed the read, I could join you in your vivid words.
Great job.
Kelli
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Having dreams like these just makes you never want to wake up. I would have loved to have had you there with me, soaking up the rays and drinking some lemonade in the sand. lol Thanks for your compliments
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