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String of silly ku's

omitting truth

only brings about

deception 

.

sandcastle

built on beach

king crabs abode

.

starfish point five ways

up, down, left, right

and wherever 

.

dragonfly

skipsacross pond -

frogs dinner 

.

unemployment line

signs of the times -

will work for food 

.

why lie

will work

for wine 

.

why lie again

will work for –

ap membership 

.

polyps in rectum

buttologist screams -

up yours 

.

get your buttologists

full attention -

hold it and wait 

.

colonoscopy

a good look into –

fiber optics

.

 

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  • Lady Altheia
    March 13, 2008

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    I am wondering why this is under adult content. Also I am not sure what the theme of this poem is. Congrats on your shiny green trophy.


  • myron silver member
    February 28, 2008

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    amusing

    this is an amusing set of haiku. i can see why you
    have called them sillyku - that's a good term for them, LOL.


    this one is my favourite with its word play, although it reads like a run-on sentence:

    sandcastle built
    on sandy beach
    for king crabs

    if you wanted to put a caesura in there, you could get rid of the 'for':

    sandcastle built
    on sandy beach
    king crabs

    actually you don't need both sandcastle and sand and beach in the same haiku, as that's too much redundancy:

    sandcastle
    built on beach
    king crabs


    sometimes a haiku can be even more tightly focused when it concentrates on the singular:

    sandcastle
    built on beach
    king crab


    LOL! i enjoyed playing around with your haiku. i hope you don't mind. please disregard my comments iof you disagree with them.

    best wishes on your haiku path,
    myron.




  • AKM Takayuki
    February 27, 2008

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    "dragonfly skips
    across pond -
    a frogs diner"

    Shouldn't diner be dinner?

    Very funny. You certainly have a talent with haikus.


  • maa gold member
    February 27, 2008

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    wow, you definitely have a lot of humor ! even facing the buttologist ...
    I love the silly ku background and its content ...

    hope you are well,

    maa

  • mina nagi
    February 25, 2008

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    These are superb and funny portrayl of visuals... I liked them all... but this is my favourite...

    "dragonfly skips
    across pond -
    a frogs diner"

    Thanx for the giggles...

    mina


  • Sir Ima Cucumber
    February 18, 2008

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    why lie still
    will work--
    no i won't

    Ah these are so good and clever, and I like the way you've linked some of them, like the work ones. Very creative. My favorite, oh geesh, which one? The starfish and the work/wine one. But they are all good, and I see why Mariza added your name to the list. It was a joy to read.


  • catz Moderators member
    February 18, 2008

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    These are great, Sis I think you either had oodles of fun writng this or took it way too seriously... lol
    Good job and I wish you best of luck in the contest


    Dee


  • klassy lassy
    February 17, 2008

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    LOLOL... how witty and thank you for the laughter.

    ...and you know, I think frogs have forked tongues! It's been a long time since I've written haiku. I hope the look into fiber optics is fiction merely for humor's sake . ~ Karen


  • Tirrell
    February 17, 2008

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    lol, this one had me smiling, I especially liked the visual of the dragon fly, and will work for food and wine, you have a wonderful sense of humor, Hope you do well in the contest


  • queen Moderators member
    February 16, 2008

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    very creative mind you have Dove These are very cute


  • Mari Goes gold member
    February 16, 2008
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    ah, the BG is great, think I'll steal it while you sleep

  • Mari Goes gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    LOL woman, you make me laugh with your humour!
    The buttku are funny!
    You have avery amusing string here, and hm, you do seem a little bit pissed off, or am I wrong?
    Love your creative mind, thank you!

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