particles of true emotions,
measured proportions
and initial intentions
leak from rotted minds.
pewter stained smoke
drips from blue lips
and freezes.
singed souls
and scorched sentences
spread the sickness.
society's disease.
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture For Your Pens #8 by Ryno.
300 points, ended February 17, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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I like the imagery and the S alliterations.
Nicely penned, adorable one.
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this one grabbed at me, short but so filled, I mean the ending is priceless!
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I love the imagery in this - you have penned a very powerful write here and I love where you took the prompt- best of luck to you as Ryno said and summed it up perfectly BAM
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BAM. Wow. This was an insanely powerful & moving piece. Its true that our true emotions, feelings, beliefs, etc, run from our minds yet what we catch from others (its in the air, I swear) is the "mask" or being of everyone else. Societys disease.
Can totally agree & relate to this piece & its wonderful imagery & strong message & emotion.
Wonderful! Thank-you for the entry! Ryan. -
A very profound piece of poetry. Very nicely written. I think you did a great job. I hope you do well in the contest.
Kelli
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