I try to be a man, but I end up being a boy.
I try to be so tough, but I'm soft as a toy.
I try not to be so sad, but it's so hard to feel any joy.
I try to do things right, but I fuck up in everything I do.
Pre-Chorus 1: Everytime I try, to stand up I get knocked on my ass.
And Everytime I cry, out to anyone they just laugh at me.
I'm feeling alone, I'm all on my own, And no-one loves me.
Chorus 1: I've failed myself, I've failed at everything
I've failed with every breath, I've failed in life
I've failed in Hell, I've failed for nothing
I've failed at my own death, I've failed in strife.
He tries to talk so big, But he's the one who's weak.
He tries to act so cool, But he's the joke of the week.
He tries to be so sincere, But he quits too fuckin' easily.
He tries to do things right, But he fucks up in everything he does.
Pre-Chorus 2: Everytime he tries, to stand up again he slips on his ass.
And Everytime he lies, no-body listens to him they just turn away.
He's feeling alone, He's all on his own, And he has nothing left to say.
Chorus 2: He's failed himself, He's failed at everything
He's failed with every breath, He's failed in life
He's failed in Hell, He's failed for nothing
He's failed at his own death, He's failed in strife.
She tries to hide her pain, But everyone sees the cuts.
She tries to fake a smile, But she can't hold it up.
She tries to give a damn, But she don't give a fuck.
She tries to do things right, But she fucks up in everything she does.
Pre-Chorus 3: Everytime she tries, to quit and move on she's right back on her ass.
And Everytime she dies, a new funeral is held for no-one she knows.
She's feeling alone, She's all on her own, And her heart is aways closed.
Chorus 3: She's failed herself, She's failed at everything
She's failed with every breath, She's failed in life
She's failed in Hell, She's failed for nothing
She's failed at her own death, She's failed in strife.
Final Chorus: We've failed ourselves, We've failed at everything
We've failed with every breath, We've failed in life
We've failed in Hell, We've failed for nothing
We've failed at our own death, We've failed in strife.
Author notes
This is about fighting against being a failure and failing. It's something I've been meaning to get off my chest. It's been bugging me for a while. I'm glad to have found this cool contest. Hope you like it, I wrote it intending to follow the rythum of Crash Alley's "2ybil".
A contest entry
- come the ones who feel whats not meant to be felt.((WARNING: harsh words are used on this page)) by SignedSinerelyMe.
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Honorable mention
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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No truer (If that is how you spell it) words have ever been spoken. How we always try to be strong and not fail at all, only to fail in everything when all the things we do are nothing but faked. To reveal the truth behind lies that to hide away your pain and your sorrow will bring you nothing but failue when it finally breaks loose. Well, this is how I perceive it. I do hope it's in a way on how you meant it.
Continue your wonderful work my friend.
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Excellent pre-musical construction, great subject matter and emotional impact. I can relate as well as I'm sure can many. Your use of vocabulary was excellent in getting across the feelings. Enjoyed the read, great work.
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ok. first off
total kudos for writing off another bands rythem and admiting it. i do like. im a big fan of repittion. if you ever read any of my poems you would know what.
i wil re-read this poem after i get that song. as a tribute to you admiting it. i believe it will help me get it more.
because right now. the length times the repititon is driving me skits-so. but. i will re read because i like the jist of it.
so consider your self lucky. and oh yeah. write me another...this ones is cool.
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