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Awakening

Slipping slowly under the anaesthetic
Peaceful dreams as the surgeons perform 
I'm lost to the oblivion of the drugs
Totally unaware of the forthcoming storm
 
Chaos and mayhem surround me, unaware
Panic and destruction to screams of evacuate
Trolleys moved with haste to the safety of the beach
Congregating in fear of the vibrating earthquake
 
The brain awakes slowly functioning not thinking
Eyes flicker half open staring straight ahead
Bright coloured birds swoop above me
It dawns on my mind I must be dead
 
"They have those on earth too" I say to a figure in white
A nurse she is stroking my hand "Yes dear, everything will be alright' 

Author notes

The prompt just brought back a story I heard of a biker who was undergoing surgery when an earthquake struck and the hospital was evacuated. He awoke on the beach with budgies flying over head and just said "They have those on earth too, cool"

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  • Tattboyspet
    February 18, 2008

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    lol! wonderful story to remember Jem
    I don't think I would've been able to keep a straight face though if he had said they have those on earth too ... ~shaking head~
    congrats on the silver my friend


    • Corvus Corone
      February 18, 2008

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      Strange how things pop into the head at times and I couldnt shake it so had to go with it. Its the image of a big macho biker saying it that gets me everytime.


  • Ithica silver member
    February 17, 2008
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    This is a wild ride... And the author's note brought it home! Congrats. on the Silver!


    • Corvus Corone
      February 18, 2008
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      Thank you Ithica, and a deserved prize for you too, I did enjoy your piece


  • Riftkin gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    I love this poem that you wrote
    for the bed on the beach.

    Thank you for entering my contest.

    Riftkin

    • Corvus Corone
      February 18, 2008
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      WOW thanks for the silver, I am chuffed to bits with that one. I guess I should dedicate it to Mr Billy Connolly who told the story on tour. And thank you for a trip back to that I needed the laugh.


  • The Poetic Angel
    February 16, 2008

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    i like this Jems .. it very dif take on the pix...good luck in the contest



    xxx Your angel xxx


    • Corvus Corone
      February 16, 2008
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      I'm learning to go with what pops in my head... enuff said my mind is a weird ass place

      xxx Jem xxx

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