Shadows fall
the ground quivers
as our storm begins it's reign
Springing open the gates of hell
joyfully dancing with the rain
of our crimson glory
As we take our place
sitting on our bony throne
covered in our soul filled canopy
Riding down the river of death
our hands intertwined
nails biting into each other's palm
as the reaper says his piece
allowing the ceremony to begin
The damned take their stance
chanting in sweet reverie
as we look into each other's ruby eyes
listening
so we can say our vows
Finally the time has come
during this gory eternal night
to become one
We both look down at our bloody hands
beginning to regain our undeniable thirst
as the reaper says we are man and wife
we kiss
Lips all but glued
allowing blood to seep through the cracks
biting down on each other's tongues
finishing with the reapers sacrifice
And soon all the world bows
recognizing our place
as the rulers of the mortal’s purgatory
the place we call our stygian home
Author notes
Option-Mix of Gothic Love and Erotica
Contest-"painful surrender"
A contest entry
- immeasurable. by girl shaman.
1150 points, ended February 24, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Painful Desires by Lost Vampyre Angel.
1000 points, ended March 6, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DE II Contestants ONLY by Immortal Obscurity.
525 points, ended March 7, 2008, 6 entries
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STUNNING DARK IMAGERY HERE. I loved this. Great flow and beautifully-created to give it an ominous foreboding feel to the piece. Well done.
Wayne Leon
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I agree with Spongy... I loved the contradiction, as he's already said, and the biting of the tongues part definitely got me! Great write, and thanks for entering! Best of luck to you!
Laura xxx
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This is kind of contradicting, don't you think?
Marriage in Hell. I think that makes it all the more creative, and the way you did it still kept in sync with the whole atmosphere. The biting of the palm part stuck out most. It was very effective, and definitely was original for the actions in this piece. I do like how the Reaper was the "priest", so to say. Good style and good display. Thanks for entering DE II. Good luck. 
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wow this is very very well written,
left me with a sense of awe,
i really loved this poem,
its not what iu expected to get but its very good,
i love the whole take on hells wedding,
good luck in the contest,
love vamp xxx
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well im not too keen to dark writing although i did at one time write somewhat dark in the past, but i feel this was a step up from most dark writes that i've read.
the images were clear which is nice; also i am very verrrrrry glad you didn't rhyme.
i dont have many suggestions other than the alignment is a bit eh but thats your choice.
so thank you for entering
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Your welcome, and thank you for reading and commenting!
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