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image: crucify the wind

 

 

 

 

 
the dead bird stared.
 

 
it had hollowed eyes, unshuttered
yet blind-
              a trait we all share
              at least once before dying.
 
              and then, once again.
 
also

each feather,
 
once worn inside the sky

where it crucified wind,
 
was arranged just so:
 
a picnic blanket over earth,
a grave-marker and peace offering
to each new friend,

arrived to feast another circle empty.
 
not closed.

    [ for vengeance is not involved in this ]
 

 

  

this final birthday-

come
to take this flesh, these quiet bones
that soared,
so sensitive to the noise of air,

to memories of wing.

 

and now to its absence.
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

http://allpoetry.com/poem/3702106
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3731560
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3790567

Drawn from the above three poems. The first, deals with memory and loss, with the inherent chaos found in all efforts to order the universe experientially.

The second is about identity- how we each build the edifice of self from the collective external views of us. How we often become who we seem to be, and how this can raise conflict where very divergent.

The third is about self-reflection, how much it can teach if we only refuse to look away.

The new poem ... well, you can decide any meaning there

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  • Pamela A Lamppa gold member
    April 8
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    Excellent

    I am so pleased to see a rightful gold trophy on this gem. Congratulations! ~Pamela


  • astralshepherd gold member
    February 19

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    lifting each image is (seemingly) easy for you - i find a natural flow of life here and the difficulty we as humans face with the passage of time - an elegant offering for the contest, a brilliant poem. blessings and best wishes,

    ~r.


  • Naridill
    February 17

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    I found this a lot firmer than the past writes in the series. Firm but weak - it's beautiful written and fluent. Although you can see the emotions in this, every word has feeling and its read inward and outward every line.

    The first six lines were very impressive.
    And the final lines were lamentingly beautiful.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    February 17
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  • Night Hope gold member
    February 16

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    "also
    each feather,

    once worn inside the sky
    where it crucified wind,

    was arranged just so:"

    I hope you have an inkling as to how incredible a writer you are, my Friend. Seamless, indeed. A veritable cornucopia of words, resplendent in imagery & form. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Wanda


  • jantastic
    February 16

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    Without the author notes I wouldn't have realized this was drawn from other works. Seamless. And stirring.


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 16

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    This is so well written - such an ache here in the absence and the hollow, unseeing eyes.... this one moved mountains within. Beautiful poetry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • misselaineous gold member
    February 16
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    beautifully done


  • NurseChilly gold member
    February 16

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    quiet bones... and silence damn this aches

    yes

    indentiy of crisis points on our souls fighting to find solid ground

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