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The Fairies

Do you believe in Fairies,
there are some who really do.
Though I walk down my garden often,
I've not even seen a few.
One little girl who really did,
went to church one day,
and said to the priest do you believe
in fairies, he laughed and turned away.
Can't say I've ever seen one,
that’s why I can’t believe.
The little girl was puzzled, and sighed with some relief.
Later after prayers, she seemed quite overawed.
She said you’re always talking to him,
Have you seen our Blessed Lord.?

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JUDMC Option 3

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    September 18, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • Judith Chandler
    August 7, 2008
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    Clever little girl!

    I really like this write


  • Doll Faise
    August 6, 2008

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    A tale told of innocence and inquiries. I absolutely enjoyed reading this. Short, but sweet. Thanks for entering. [= Good luck.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    Adorable story...it conveys the beauty
    of innocence well, connecting it to
    eyes that are not narrowed. It diverts
    from magic and midsummer to reflect on
    faith and those who believe completely
    what others fail to see or understand.
    Blue


  • CrystalFlower
    August 3, 2008

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    It's very beautiful. I believe in fairies! Hehe. Anyways... You forgot something in your author note. Read the rules.


  • Pandorea
    July 12, 2008

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    ah! so cute. i like it. just the typos inth is line "Cant say Iv'e ever seen one" got to me.

    thanks for entering.


  • Samcat
    June 19, 2008

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    haha! great story! Brilliant it's really good, i love the ending with the little girl! great job
    Good Luck!
    x


  • maa gold member
    April 7, 2008
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    amazing !
    what a lovely story with a truly insightful message and astonishing ending ... just my cup of tea ... what a powerful lesson the innocent little girl was teaching to the priest ...
    it really makes us want to become those little children who are said to have access to the kingdom of god !

    thank you so much for this cherished entry,
    maa

    • judmc
      April 7, 2008
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      Maa

      Many thanks for your very kind comments on "The Fairies
      they are very much appreciated I have posted over 120 poems
      since 30th December and because of the speed involved
      "The Fairies" and many others have passed by unnoticed
      Thanks again and Best Wishes.George


  • Emile
    February 26, 2008

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    Good

    You are a master story teller and I await breathlessly for your next saga to unfold. Your story takes the essence of dreams loved by young and old and distills that magic into an amusing story that flaunts reality and has fun with our desires to be entertained by thoughts of wonder.

    "Have you seen Blessed Lord?" this line needs someting like "Have you seen (our) Blessed Lord?" or to rhyme with "overawed" "Have you seen (the face of God)?".

  • amysticwriter silver member
    February 20, 2008
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    Beautiful...I believe in angels...does that count?...
    mystery

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