I kiss the make-up off your face
and lift you up out of the chair
we can travel anywhere
when we feel love
your breasts send me to outer space
you kiss my brain back into place
we hug until we're both not there
as we feel love
I throw my jeans into the air
your summer dress lands on the stove
your twinkling eyes are in my stare
as we feel love
we're rolling on the kitchen floor
your heart is beating at my chest
both of us in underwear
as we make love
I tell you what you mean to me
our words turn into poetry
and all our problems disappear
as we make love
Author notes
Romantic Love
- Erotic Desires group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Types Of Love(NEED TYPE 1 BEFORE JUDGING) by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended March 31, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Erotic Desires Reading List ~
Beautifully romantic and sensual
This piece reaches out in only the sweetest of ways enchanting me without over-showing imagery, the mind can play with the love you've expressed - nicely done 
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Wonderful imagery in this sensual write!
Well done and thanks for posting it here.
Jeremy0826 -
i hope the stove isnt one lol good right.
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So very sensual and oozing with heartfelt emotion...I loved this! Not graphic but wonderfully romantic with an airy breeze
terrific job!
~ Ink
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so passionate without being "over the top"...well done!
when the passion rises, it doesn't matter where you are, eh?
Thank you for sharing with the group
Best wishes,
Heavenly Angel -
had me smiling:))))
I liked how you discribed such feelingsbreath taking!i enjoyed every line..well written! so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet!
juliet....a for such great poem!
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Bj, this is great..my brother I have said before I do love your erotic stylings and I love this one too
it doesnt go so deep but it says it ll so well, with such love, like it should
Cin
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I likes this poem...
but, can you make love with your underwear on? I guess you could... maybe if her panties were pushed to the side or taken off and on a lamp???
Harmony -
That's gorgeous, love it! I checked this one out cos I saw on your page that you wanted to attempt erotica.
I was expecting it to not be so soft, but I like it because it's very romantic.
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A touch of soft porn and quietly tittilating write.
Brings back memories of younger days. Happy trails -
this is beautiful. flows nicely with good use of rhyme. passionate and romantic with a soft erotic infusion. isn't love wonderful (sighs!!)
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Amazing writing, shows the heart and love towards your girlfriend. She is definitely on your mind when you wrote this poem.
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its a really nice and very creative poem love it so much!!
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very nice flow.slowly rocks your body as if a quiet love song was playing
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Blink blink...
well, THAT woke me up
Soft.
Love, Lane
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Great flow imagery rhyme and tone. Nailed it!
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is that you in the Picture?
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Picture
Thanks. NO.
Is that you in your avatar?
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sweet
it is nice -
Love and lust go hand and hand in this piece. The repitition of the last line in each stanza worked well and emphasized the theme 'romantic love'. I am not too sure how romantic a kitchen floor is though! perhaps I should try it some time and find out?
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kitchen floor
Thanks for taking the time to read some of my attempts at poetry. Glad to know the refrain works for you. The kitchen floor is romantic, but not comfortable.
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It would make your poem seem better written to captilize your i's, its just proper grammer. Its just one of my pet peeves
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I
OK, done...
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Thank you for including the type for me as I ask. This really is romantic love in all aspects. I love this poem. Just one thing i=I. I love this part:
i tell you what you mean to me
our words turn into poetry
and all our problems disappear
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Romantic
Thanks! You wish for me to change i to I?
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which phase in love or phases is this. I asked for it in AN, please. then I will comment on your lovely poem. Not tryng to be rude it is my rules.
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Rules.
Romantic Love.
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wow this is so good its loving and romantic
i tell you what you mean to me
our words turn into poetry
and all our problems disappear
as we make love
this part makes me happy to know theres guys like that out there who dont want to have sex they want to make love so again wow keep up the good writes
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Demons
Thanks Demons - glad you liked it. Thanks for the applause.
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Such a lovely sensual piece!! A kind of playfulness to begin with (the kitchen floor huh.. nice!)... yet this piece also speaks of love, not just lust (even though that is a part of it)... I just love sensuality in writing, and this is fab... tasteful yet sexy at the same time! Can't wait to read more!
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playfulness
Thanks Kiwi! I'm new to erotica, so I'm rapt to get your response to this. Glad you saw the love in it.
I hope my gf love it. I'm giving it to her as an anniversary prsent.
Yours in sensuality,
BJ.
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"i tell you what you mean to me
our words turn into poetry
and all our problems disappear
as we make love"
this last stanza is beautiful.
and while this may be lightly erotic, it is not at all in poor taste.
it's so light and lovely-- great job. -
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Light & Lovely
Thank you very much. I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
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Wow~~
Oh My what images You have woven within Your words and Love the passion brought forth~
also the innocent sensual foreplay where the reader can't help but smile
The repetition adds that extra touch~
like a reminder of the special moment together
Steamy~~
Like the notes in the AC~
Oy how many drafts I have done on some pieces
Keep that quill dancing~~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thoughtful
Hello Desire - thank you very much for your thoughtful response to this poem. I wrote it for my gf - it's our first year together today and I plan to give it to her. I hope she likes it.
Erotically & poetically yours,
BJ.
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incredible piece of erotic work here!
i really love this ending...
"we're rolling on the kitchen floor
your heart is beating at my chest
both of us in underwear
as we make love
i tell you what you mean to me
our words turn into poetry
and all our problems disappear
as we make love"
great piece!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins -
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incredible
Thank you very much Mike. I appreciate your comments and the fact that you read this poem.
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I like these beautiful lines...
"We're rolling on the kitchen
your heart is beating at my chest"
Galaxy2
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beautiful
Hello there! Thanks for reading this and triple thanks for the applause. Much appreciated.
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Well Done!!
This is a very unique approach to erotica, and full of the wonder and beauty of love and making love!!! I enjoyed reading this!!
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It was a a nice piece. I know I've definitely seen erotic poems done in poor taste...on accident. This is good on your part.
The only thing I noticed was possibly the over usage of the word kiss in stanza two. Dig a little deeper and find some other descriptive words. This is all opinion though.
More opinion: I could tell it was a passionate moment and there is a lot of description of scenery and action but I wanted more of the emotion and the interpretation of these emotions. I got a little taste....again this is only opinion. Perhaps, what is she doing (you know the little things different people do during that moment; i.e. goosebumps from the tiny hairs standing on end and what not, what she sounds like, what she says to you).
I applaud the work but I know it can mean more. Hope that wasn't too critical.
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unusual
you're a man, right? and you're thinking about your partner while you're making love? I mean, at the time, not beforehand, not afterwards, but right at the moment? What country do you come from? How do I get there?
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to be honest, this was rather confusing, i was able to make sence out of a couple of the stanzas but the second stanza really threw me off, the third one also threw me off alot too, so, i dont really know what else to say about this, except i didnt really understand it and that your making love
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Confusing
Yes, unfortunately they are confusing verses, in much the same way that love is confusing.
Thank you very much for being honest with me. I appreciate that.
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i see your breasts in outer space
you kiss my brain back into place
we kiss and then we're not there
as we make love
I loved that. this totally speaks to me right now! A well timed read indeed. I know exactly what you mean
Great write! pen on poet
creatress
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breasts in outer space
Thank you very much oh activist poet, glad to see you read this poem and lovely to know that you identified with it.
Thanks heaps for the applause!
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great read what a lucky girl she is and how sweet and sensual are your words truly a piece of love
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Piece of Love
Thank you very much. I am appreciative of your commnets.
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Nice piece of erotica!!! Well rounded and enough to give your readers a few palpitations Keep penning poet!
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Palpitations
Thanks Ithica - it's very nice of you to read this and say cool comments about it.
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your girlfriend is one lucky girl, lol. Wow, I love the use of your words, you have a poetic magic to your pen and its exciting. Well done.
~Lia
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POETIC MAGIC
Hello Lia. Thank you very much for responding to my poem> I am very pleased you described 'poetic magic in my pen" - that's a lovely phrase!
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Nicely written you may want to make the I capitial not sure if you wanted it that way, but as far as the poen goes prety steamy!!!!!
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steamy
Thanks for reading my erotica. It's all in lower case and I had hoped I could get away with a small i. perhaps i should think more on it?
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Yes a poetry of love and wanting. Excellent
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Love and Wanting
Thank you very much for all your applause you're giving me. It makes me feel gr7! Oops! I mean gr8!
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