I can't stand it
When I'm looking at you
Walking the other way
Away from me
I cry myself to sleep every night
I just don't want to be away from you
Why can't we be friends?
At least
One year, one whole year
Since you've talked to me properly
Yet I still cry over you
I don't want to cry
So please, don't leave me in the rain
To find my own way home
Don't leave my in the storm
Where the wild winds have blown
Every day I see you
Is just causing more pain
So turn around and look at me
Please don't walk away
Author notes
I was listening to a song and I wanted to write... so I did.
Random... comments?
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hmm simple and heartbreaking...
...i could see you placed your sadness in here
no worries, you'll get better soon and i've been there before ^^
keep it up, all right n.n
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This is a nice strong felt poem. It was very relatable. I liked it alot. Keep it up
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Well, you have a strong message. I think it would have been more effective if you had begun with the rain and storm imagery at the beginning. It had the sense of an afterthought the way it stands. Your interjecting stanzas are good, single stanzas can add power to emphasize a point. I liked this piece. It was a good write.
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I think everyone could relate to this at some point or another. Really hit home with me... I like that it's not too long and it's easy to understand. I'll definitely try to check out some more of your stuff.
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Awesome
I really liked the emotion that you brought out in this. It struck a cord with me and how I once felt about one that got away.
Thanks for sharing!
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