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Tramp

Lights flicker

Dingy figures
  dirty rooms

Cockroaches touch me
like I'm theirs

I need the money


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Interesting competition, so I entered.

Some situations make you feel like you can't breathe, I probably would choke like this.

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  • acari27 gold member
    February 27, 2008

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    whoa, cockroaches touch me like im theirs - wow, i cant explain it, this doesnt reek of a contest entry, which i can often find contrived, so so good

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    February 16, 2008

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    This is a great piece... you have used the 16 words well

    Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, wishing you the best of luck

    Karen