Reluctantly I fold her into my arms
protecting her for the last time, from the evil that surrounds her
cutting back her protective coating, exposing her to life
clipping her innocents, the world she will now see
Protecting her for the last time, from the evil that surrounds her
asking God to take her heart, and guide her
showing her the path that she was born to walk
stepping from each stone to the next, with confidence
Cutting back her protective coating, exposing her to life
I know she will have heart break, tears there will be
she'll have to learn from her mistakes
only then, will she truly be set free
clipping her innocents, the world she will now see
joy and sorrow, she needs to feel these things
I know she'll be triumphant, I know she'll make me proud
giving her a chance to grow, I know I've done right by my Angel
Author notes
I had wrote this for a contest: (http://allpoetry.com/contest/2391373 )
I was so inspired by the photo that I didn't read the requirements before I wrote my poem. I just started writing. It wasnt until I went to post my poem I saw that it needed to be 20 words.. and my poem, was well over 20 words. My mistake.
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hi there, no realy it is a very heart touching piece and very very amazing, i wish i could write like tht. im being serous, and im sorry i miss interpreted what you said x
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This is lovely hon..
Your steps I may never walk
for they are meant for you
Your path I can never take
but they'll be not one, but two
Your life I can never live
and I know not where you'll go
But my love's seed I sent with you
so that within you it may grow
Hugs...Eddy
We can only guide to a certain point
and that it is up to the other individual
to pursue the remaining path alone.
Hopefully our teachings will get them
safely though to the other side
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Hey There- It has been awhile since i have commented on any of your stuff... i'm sorry for that i'm not really on here that often anymore..anywho i really liked this piece a lot. Lots of good powerful emotion. I especially liked the last line
clipping her innocents, the world she will now see
joy and sorrow, she needs to feel these things
I know she'll be triumphant, I know she'll make me proud
giving her a chance to grow, I know I've done right by my Angel
Keep it up!!
Love
Janine -
Criss, I have done things like that myself and I leave them in with a note to the host. It is up to them whether or not they choose to DQ. This is absolutely magnificent and reminds me of that butterfly as it leaves the cocoon. That last thread holding it severed by nature's shears so that it may fly free in all its glory. When a child leaves it's mother's womb it seems so short a time in her eyes before that child has to be set free, the string cut. We have faith in them as we do in nature. They are both so beautiful. Thank you for sharing your beauty with all of us. Love you my friend, Joyce
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great writing... well done so long as your releasing your feelings then it does not matter how long it is...
cheers
Jen
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Thank you. I actually liked this one =)
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Well done
This is really nice and a major step forward...It read as fast as 20 words......Loved it...
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