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soul whispers

 

 

 

 shushed to silence:
sanguine,
heart:

 

whisper:
beat beat beat

they count in reverence:
without knowing
innocence:

 

whisper:
lost lost lost

 

searching, learning

touching, seeing

feeling:

 

whisper:

safe safe safe...

 

betrayals rendered

fractured

souls:

 

whisper:

love love love

 

she remembers:

she always whispered

 

okay okay okay...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 











 

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i have been exploring these things a lot recently... this is what came

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  • Emmjay
    June 4, 2008

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    Beautiful writing here misscelaineous . If feels so wonderfully soft, gentle flowing tide.
    I've read the previous comments and I feel a little less than, only in honestly telling you I don't follow it 100%. It's not the poem, more my own inability to explore and analyse deeply. I'm not a very patient man ...
    ...but I do love the feel, the expressive tones and the almost 'surrealistic' breathing the poem inspires
    Congrats on the HM, well deserved.
    Best wishes -Emmjay


  • voices
    March 13, 2008
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    prayers best in lower case volume
    movment while still.
    lovely.


  • Allyce May gold member
    February 19, 2008

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    Lovelyyyyyyyy

    I particularly liked "shushed to silence". The whole thing is very...pretty, for lack of a more suitable word. But in a good way, like a melody. Such a mixed bag of emotions, but brilliant poetry!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    February 18, 2008
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    I love the feel of this Elaine.

  • davidwright silver member
    February 17, 2008
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    An interesting play on words and well done. I enjoyed it. Happy trails


  • NurseChilly gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    a careful placement of words and love bring out the most beautiful whisper...

    perfection, my friend


  • le soir
    February 17, 2008
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    unique... very lovely congrats on the HM- much deserved


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    February 16, 2008
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    this is wonderful elaine...


    al


  • Zayra Yves
    February 16, 2008

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    I truly love the way you wrote this poem in a 3D type of way. It is unconventional poetry that reaches right into the heart. It takes what is "out there" and brings it "right here." I appreciate your style and your soul in sharing.

    • misselaineous
      February 16, 2008
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      and a huge thank you for allowing me to express it here and for your achnowledgement that means so much
      love to you

      elaine

  • Evil Eyes gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    ah Elaine.. you do have that way of tugging at one.. You gave me such rich imagery here I could weave so many different stories..

    but knowing.. we do what we have to do to survive my friend.. and then we grow up and become strong survivors..



    Always,

    Catressa


  • tara wilson gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    you know....it is always nice to come across a poem that explores...I love this!! I love the title, perfect for the poem..this is soooo unique..and very lovely...


  • transcendental baby gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    Wow, I love the way you use the cadence of the repeated word like a whisper ... it excentuates (is that spelled right? ) the meaning behind the italized word and gives it the power to speak


  • Namita
    February 15, 2008

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    This is amazing. Yes, different from your usual, but damn good. Exploring is good... that's what real poets do... and you indeed are one. Beautiful, Elaine.

    - namita

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    When that soul whispers it is the loudest sound we ever hear and oh my, how it echoes within our own soul.Poignant, so very poignant dearest poetess.


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    yes... the red hearts, the loss of innocence, the numbed feelings, the betrayal of childhood, the okay okay we have to whisper so very often in our work, Elaine. I know this so very well (just like you do) and you wrote this with the voice, the hand that understands...and soothes. Beautiful...this moves mountains within.

    ~ Nicolette

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