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Spring In The Woods

Fish swimming; Current
Rushing; Breeze blowing; Flowers
Blooming; Pretty sight

Author notes

the ; seperates different thoughts/characteristics

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  • ukelova
    February 17, 2008

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    verbal

    Hello there.
    You were sure able to cram a lot into your little poem. It made it look big.

    How many verbs did you put into it?
    Wow! Congrayulations on packing them in.

    have a gr8 day,
    BJ.



  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    awwwwww how lovely, wonderful poem
    love the way yo broke it downbetsof luck in the contest
    stephanie =)


  • azure85 gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    Fish swimming; Current
    Rushing; Breeze blowing; Flowers
    Blooming; Pretty sight

    Thank you for your author's notes, so I can see the thoughts you expressed. Lots of nice images, thank you so much.


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    February 15, 2008

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    Beautiful

    I really loved this piece alot. I loved the simplisitc beauty to this haiku and also really loved the way it was portrayed. the way you broke this haiku down with ;'s was ingenius. any ways very much loved the way you lead us into thias Haiku and then the imagination and sense just go wild wqith what is portrayed through out this. any ways keep up the good work and good luck in the contest.


  • individuality gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    An enjoyable piece of poetry, though the semi-colon is more used to elaborate ideas rather than separate words, a good poem.

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