I dip my foot into the placid water and watch the ripples flow
This quiet disturbance is all I need to make the audience know
It was beauty, and faith, but never love
For love is brilliant, but also satanic, is there a difference or not?
Mabey there will be answers, mabey there will be none
But every now and then, when I see the sun
My make up fades
My skin develops
And this beautiful midnight story has just begun
A contest entry
- It was the midnight... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended February 19, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Here and there I found a little oopsie, but overall you did quite a good job with this poem.
I like the non-coincidental rhyme you have used as well
Thank you for this entry!
Leander -
I used to sit near a lake in my youth and often dangling my feet there. Once a turtle actually bit my toe
It freaked me out and hurt like heck. this is a lovley piece.
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Other than a few spelling mistakes you have written a very nice piece of poetry. I would correct those mistakes as they do distract from what is being read.
Thank you for entering.
Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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PLease correct the spelling on this and it is a beautiful write
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This is a wonderful write, beatifully done. I enjoyed the read very much. Maybe is misspelled howevery. I hope you do well in the contest.
Kelli
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