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Restless

In the simple silence
of impassive-ever-after
the armies of time and timelessness
stalk a moment,
a smothering pause
before the sound
of a thundering drop
precedes the storm

the first flash aimed
in war of restlessness

idle hands,
idle time,
play much to roughly
with my idle mind.

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  • ashjoe76
    March 10
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    :)

    Very profound. I vote for the subtle nuances and intelligent and appealing alliteration. Congrats!

  • maa gold member
    February 23

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    another amazing poem from your inspired muse ...
    a great metaphor for duality's amusing play on the stage of life ...


    maa


  • Grateful
    February 22

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    wow..this is a wonderful poem with a seamless dimension of poetic expression...inspiring write with the mystic touch...

    my favourite lines:

    "In the simple silence
    of impassive-ever-after.."

    i really enjoyed it....thank you

  • ashjoe76
    February 18

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    excellent

    I love this poem for its simplicity of thought and the deeper meanings one could find at repeated readings. Best regards.


  • indomitable
    February 16
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    rawr. this is gorgeous and perfect, i love it.


  • Danna Hobart
    February 16
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    This is brilliant. I think you have captured that restless feeling perfectly.

  • capricornpoet silver member
    February 15

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    inspired thoughts

    How can I say more of "Restless", this was haunting and inspired...dark and eloquent..wonderful weave..

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