Love crusted shadows hide in contempt.
sullen notions protest at hours mis~spent.
Distorted dreams rupture, ached with need.
Now left ripped twisted to bleed.
Icy malice expands, enthralment has gone.
Hollow to the core, destiny was wrong.
Flames are all out extinguished by the breeze.
Hope floats away dancing in the leaves.
Emotions swiftly plummet eyes were ruby red.
Body was so numb, empty and dead.
True love given, a precious gift.
Now left a bleak, vast internal rift.
Never again will doors open.
No heart left,to be broken.
Void keeps growing, wider every day.
Subject of love?
I have nothing to say.
Author notes
Prompt; 2. Anti-love-
LadyDementia
Background made by me.
A contest entry
- Dark Poetry Options by RX-Queen.
375 points, ended February 19, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Wow!!! Touching the void...
Crushed & lonely empty shell devoid of love's despair,
beyond the point of turning back, alone without a care.
No longer laughter in thine eyes, with tears dried to naught.
Where love once dwelled a void has grown, where emptiness is fraught.
Sorry, couldn't help myself... lol!
As always, another fantastic write that didn't fail to move me & leave me contemplative...
Well done!!!
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Hehe you should expand that!
Thanks for the comment and clappies 
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Wow!
I'm not even sure what to say! This is amazing. It rhymed very nicely. It wasnt forced, and thats hard to find now a days. Your poem just pulled me in and kept me reading. Very good job. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
<3 Vampy -
Ohhhh me likes! I really did enjoy this entry, I think it neatly avoids being cliche by your choice of wording and the strong emotions seeping through. I love the feel of this poem - very very good job on this. Thank you for your entry into my humble little contest, I will add this to the finalists' list.
Favorite lines I think were....
Love crusted shadows hide in contempt.
sullen notions protest at hours mis~spent.
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How the hell have I not commented on this!!!! I'm sure I read it...
totally feel that hun!
The background is great!!
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wow... the effect of your words have cautivated me.. love the way you've descirbe the true feeling of love.. please place your name and option in your author notes... thanks for entering!
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my bad, sorry. Have added my name
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this was so sad.
I hope that you are able to heal soon...this line caught my attention and stuck with me the whole time...
"Hope floats away dancing in the leaves."
amazing.
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Strong wording
Descrbing a lot. Again another of yours where, I was truly able to feel your words, hear your heart speaking
Cindy
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sorrow engulfs those whose heart has simple given up. it is in these times that we sometimes forget about the beauty of the world and everything become blah, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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wow i love it!i thought you could only write nightmares but i was wrong this is sad and beautiful.i love the second stanza but the whole thing is great
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Thanks for Sharing
Another fantastic write.
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great job
this was a very good write. I love the way you finished it, very good!!!!!
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