The vision of her skin and the outline of her shape is reflected in his eyes
She found solace and comfort within his arms,
While he found pleasure and warmth in another women’s bed
Slowly losing the light of her life in his lies
This world will tear you apart.
A man stares at an unseen spot on the wall,
shaking as he tries not to hate those that despise him.
His skin color is different,
and to them, he must die for such a crime.
This world will tear you apart.
A woman speaks her mind,
and a lash comes down across her back.
Men try to protect her,
but her life is given to the cause she tries to support.
This world will tear you apart.
A child is born in America,
yet his mother was not.
People come to bring him to a horrible home,
as his mother is deported back to where she had once escaped.
This world will year you apart.
The nursery sits bare with walls still empty,
While the mother mourns the loss of an unnamed child.
A coffin so tiny becomes black beneath the ground,
A cry never heard rings through the air.
This world will tear you apart.
A man searches for the love he once knew,
And finally finds that one that makes him smile.
Feelings make him go so numb inside that his heart can’t stand the strain
He leaves a girl crying ten feet from the alter.
This world will tear you apart.
A daughter cries black tears of mascara,
As her beloved possession is taken from her life
A small whisper can be heard “why daddy?”
As she slows floats away.
This world will tear you apart
Tires screech and a little boy screams,
Loud crash and a river of red flows from the street.
A horn pierces the new silence,
As more men and women join arms with others.
This world will tear you apart.
Men stand in line, their heads held high,
They are leaving their mothers to help their country
We respect them and cry when we hear,
Another man’s life is taken across the sea
This world will tear you apart.
People from below scream as a faceless man hits the ground,
closing their eyes, and covering their ears, they wish not to see.
For how in the world, could such a monument be destroyed.
2800 more graves are dug, as the date 9-11 is engraved in our minds.
This world will tear you apart.
Pain and lies, filled with despair
Torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
A world with false love and resented obligation
A life where even karma isn’t fair
This world will tear you apart.
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- Speak out! by Luna Argintie.
930 points, ended September 9, 2008, 205 entries
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Interesting read
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Very true
Pain and lies, filled with despair
Torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
A world with false love and resented obligation
A life where even karma isn’t fair
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hello
I like the last line of the poem, that really sums everything up nicely.I can also relate to the scond to last stanza, good job,
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Wow. I don't even know what to say. This poem grabs you right from the start and commands your attention. You painted so many sad pictures here, at least something that I'm sure all of us can relate to. This world really can be a sad place.
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Well, you have managed to capture a whole lot within the lines of this poem. the tragedy and the good feelings that appear in such a situation at the same time.
I'm not sure about the repetition of "The world will tear you apart" after every stanza, but that's probably because I'm not the biggest fan of repeating lines.
Keep it up!
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Wow...just...wow
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whoa..this is just..indescribable perhaps..but words permit to come up with powerful and intense. The emotion in this is so strong and I can feel the pain that lies behind stanzas such as: The vision of her skin and the outline of her shape is reflected in his eyes
She found solace and comfort within his arms,
While he found pleasure and warmth in another women’s bed
Slowly losing the light of her life in his lies
This stanza especially touched me..in fact, I would love it if you read my poem "Disembodiment of Myself" which relates to that stanza. Overall, this is beautifully written and I respect your insight immensely. I commend you on this, not because it is merely well-written, but because you have captured and presented to us the truth. -
Truth in your words that show the comedy/tragedy of this world. There is always at least two sides to every misfortune, or twist of destiny. Though a purpose to everything happening for a reason is sometimes just too unreasonable a thought, the world tears us apart more or less to the degree which we realize fate.... accepting fate isn't easy in an unfair world.
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very thoughtful
you have clearly thought long and hard about these things and this really comes through. There is a lot in this poem.
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Wow
It's so captivating. I really did enjoy it. I have one something like it actually. It's called World Turned Silent if you would ever like to read it. Thanks for sharing and Good Luck in the contest!
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Pain and lies, filled with despair
Torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
A world with false love and resented obligation
A life where even karma isn’t fair
This world will tear you apart.
The above is so true. The World will tear you apart from family to friends. I love the entire poem. It flows extremely well.
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you know this is great!The nursery sits bare with walls still empty,
While the mother mourns the loss of an unnamed child.
A coffin so tiny becomes black beneath the ground,
A cry never heard rings through the air.
this part made me cry the whole thing is sad and scary.
very well written.really good stuff i didint even feel like reading a long poem but it sucked me in,and im glad i came across it
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well done but not especially dark...so many of these things are close to reality...soldiers to war, infidelity, consequences... and truly tearing apart...very expressive write here ...very well done...PK
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Great & Sad!
You paint all the scenario with stories fitting the Title. Nice work. Congrats. Hope you do well in the contest. You picked a good background for this piece.
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wow. I really really like this poem. every stanza gave me new goosebumps, and it was very intense for me. I really enjoyed reading it though. I was able to relate to almost every word written down here. It was really incredible for me to be able to read such amazing words and see how accurate they are. And as sad as it seems, I really do think and fully believe that this words has torn me apart. But, is there a way to be put back together again? and how? Questions that we may never find the answers to still lay unsolved... Good luck in the contest!
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This is a good poem. Very deep. I love the background. This went really well with the poem. Good luck in the contest. Blessed Be! ~~Shannon~~
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Dark truth
The truth does hurt. Life is not fair, and the world does tear us apart from time to time. Life sometimes is what we make it to be. Your poem has pointed out some deep negativity. Keep in mind also that there are sometimes good things in life. Good job, and thanks for sharing.
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A man stares at an unseen spot on the wall,
shaking as he tries not to hate those that despise him.
His skin color is different,
and to them, he must die for such a crime.
This world will tear you apart.
A woman speaks her mind,
and a lash comes down across her back.
Men try to protect her,
but her life is given to the cause she tries to support.
So sad...we're blinded. Great Job
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Yes this world can tear us apart....but without that extreme, we wouldn't know the joy of what its like to be put back together.
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This is a very intense work! Social injustice and private tortured lives. Perhaps a bit scattered in selections, but each slice of life was sad and raw. The last stanza pulls it into better perspective. Well done.
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This is a great poem.
You are a great poet.
Other than the contest, what was your inspiration for writing this poem?????
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beautiful and deep.
Amazing poem
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whoah this war really good
i love the imagery!
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I love this poem immensely. Great imagery to match the seriousness of the subjects in tow. It was very enjoyable to read. Great job!!
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An enjoyable piece of poetry, I kept thinking of the band Joy Division with their song Love Will Tear You Apart, a good poem.
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Very good
This poem was very good. It has a very strong and powerful message and was well written. The reader truely gets to witness the tragedies of the human condition.
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BRAVO!!! This poem went straight to my soul.
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Oh sheeeer energy, wow! Oy oy oy!!!
Aw, man. Now you done gone and blown my mind. Again.
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es this world will tear you apart - a little too quickly now that we have 7-24 'news' all the time on cable interesting write about a plethora of subjects thanks for sharing regards zaj
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I love this!
pain and lies with despair
torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
a world with falls love and resented obligation
a life where karma isn't fair
its like a goodbye kiss to me.
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Very beautiful and very heartfelt.
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This was definatly dark and original. I really liked this poem. It felt like it was speeding by me with this horrible images and it tore at my heart.
So true.
Very good job!
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Powerful piece full of the many outrages faced on a daily basis. I could hear this resounding in my head as I read it. Couple of typos and with that fix this would be perfect! You held with the main idea through out and leave the reader fully engaged in what you are saying here! I liked it a lot!
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Great
This is a great read. It is a poignant catalog of injustices. Nice job.
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A child is born in America,
yet his mother was not.
Peopel come to bring him to a horrible home,
as his mother is deported back to where she had once escaped.
That!
Just..hit me harshly more than anything else,
I mean everything else IS true and this poem is wonderful, but tha stanza holds so much power, so much everything. Anyways this was a great poem.
When i started reading I said, Oh no some other cliche poem..and then BAM it was great
LOVe it!
..Simply Me♥
God Bless you & Jesus loves you hun, Just trust Him.
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Wonderfully written ~
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I liked the style of this a lot. Each vignette bringing home the main theme in a powerful way. So many of us feel this truth about the hard and difficult path life can leave us with. I personally have found that we must bring our own happiness to it, and carve out our own reality to counteract the one you describe here. An excellent write, thank you.
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wow that left me speechless, Beauitful.
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I like the style of this poem well done
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This was put together amazingly well... Truly touching piece, creating images in the reader's head that are vivid and disturbing... because it's the truth. the world we life in shown from it's dark side...
Great write, keep it up.
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Wow! This is a very powerful poem. I do like the way each stanza tells a seperate story in its entirety, yet all add up to the sense of betrayal in the final stanza. Thoughtful and provocative piece but it needs some spelling correction in stanzas 3 & 4 because it disturbs the flow as you read.
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Your words create vivid visions that are bleak, dark, desolate and steeped in harsh realities.
Yes, this world will tear you apart, in so many ways.
A very cool poem!
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very authentic and honest, I was moved by this. Sometimes it is clear to us that this is the only truth that there is. Powerful write.
One Love
Justine
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HOrribly true, real and raw. Pain ful subject matter, presented well.
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