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Classified Grief

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Voices raging arguments
Blood splattered on the wall
Tears are shed on mothers

As fathers cause their fall

 

Abbandoning affections

Love lost within the lies

Blame becomes accostom

Acception just denies

 

Child listens closely

Drowning in her fears

Each sound to make an echo

Tormenting her poor ears

 

Acussing life is miserable

To say it was her fault

A pest to him he tells her

Their misery; he sought

 

Ignorance would be better

But she leaned against her door

Revolting screams she heard

Her mother on the floor

 

Covers closed around her

Looking for that blade

Guilt arising quickly

Punishment is made 

 

Gushing out so quickly

Rivers running red

Smell of death decaying

Dead bodies in the bed.

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luna-midnight

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  • DesolatELifE
    February 24

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    'Tears are shed on mothers' is a strange line. I like it, obviously.

    The last line is very good, too. Most of the other lines are very good. In fact, all of them, but in my voice, 'fault' and 'sought' do not rhyme at all, which made that verse less ncie for me.


  • Disturbedmess silver member
    March 26, 2008

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    wow this is very powerful.....i love this...unfortunatly with no name in the AC i cant award, but im glad that you still entered. this is a great poem. also very sad....


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    A very emotional piece, superbly penned. So sad that it actually happens. Best of luck in the contest with it

  • know one
    March 1, 2008
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    wow

    this is amazing it has great flow
    well done


  • KeepingTime
    March 1, 2008
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    Pretty.

    This is full of emotion. It is writtin very beautifully.

    Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Tangled Angle
    February 26, 2008
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    Very nice. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • nobody knows me
    February 23, 2008

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    Thankyou for entering my contest this was a good poem good luck x

    For getting into the finalists x


  • ley527
    February 17, 2008
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    wow,this is one of the most powerful pieces of writing I've read in quite some time. It's Beautiful


  • XxunBeautifulxX
    February 16, 2008

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    OMG

    i so and totally could feel the emotion could hear the crys of pain not a lot of poems can d that but this one did. Very good write.


  • Amber Rose
    February 16, 2008

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    Wow...

    I feel this poem so close to me... The words cut into you somehow... Maybe I've been there before. Maybe I've heard it with my own ears. Maybe I was that girl. But even if I wasn't and hadn't, I feel her inside me. I feel her around me. I feel her with me. Amazing... Best of luck to you


  • Violent Glass
    February 16, 2008
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    this so so sad
    yet happens so frequently
    thanx for entering

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