Lift my hands
You are already here
SHINIGAMI feeding from lifespans
The lies beyond your eyes can't be told
But the drums are hailing you as if there were no sin
Open your mouth
Speak your words to the last
I have nothing at all to offer you
But you still have to taste me with SANDPAPER
I have fought too much and I still have this pendant fight
To be together with you
(Insert scream here)
Did you need
To put every men on a cross?
Are we paying for the sin of reaching you?
Is the sky red enough for your luscious feast?
But the bamboo is still growing, my leftovers still scream
Invading your territory
But the spears can't hit the CRYSTAL SKIN
The sin spills from you to the core of the dirt
You can say it's only your loathe towards opposite heat
What do you have inside? The night is not a night without a moon
"What your soul hides, blood tells"
Author notes
"Shinigami" means God of death in Japanese.
A contest entry
- DARK writes PW by InMyFlames.
380 points, ended February 18, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Dark by satan-.
460 points, ended March 2, 2008, 75 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ooh, I like the bit of japanese there. Man, I love that last quote at the end. Great write, thanks for entering.
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wow that is a dark write and i feel it has a message in your words but Im still thinking on it your words convey alot well done
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thanks thats new to me "Shinigami" he he i like it....
the (insert scream here) seems pointless and doesnt fit in.the questions i must say annoy me with a passion. i love the last quote at the end "What your soul hides, blood tells" but the capitals in the middle of the piece are random and draw the attention off the rest of the poem as you are reading along all i see is the capitals and i cant focus on the rest. (if this your aim please enlighten me. i also love this line "The sin spills from you to the core of the dirt" i love the imaginary coming out of it, i love the randomess and how it cant be seen as real, it is like a line i would use, so thats why i lov it so much. Thanks for entering my contest. o by the way change the title it wont attract many readers and i thankyou for entering something new and fresh i enjoyed reading it
Keep well,
Em
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The capital written words are certain words for exactly that, drawing attention. They are supposed to be the strongest parts of the poem, like making the reader realize how lost is the battle.
About the random part (Insert scream here), it's the difference between the first and the second part of it. If you can realize, in the 15th line there's already a real pain from the battler, spectator, however you want to call it.
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