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Just Be


With you, there is no reason
to ever return to the place
where the tears flowed.

Treasonous past loves leave
without a place to return.

Your sunshine warms me,
and my soul gathers you in,
lets your love serenade me.

You reach in.
Wipe away what was.
Allow joy to just be.

 

 

(c)  Debby Sorensen Carlson

 February 15, 2008

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  • Zanerus
    May 29, 2008

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    Its a poem about God, Not to sound like I'm diminishing your skills but its easy to see it with the last stanza. After all Christ reaches in and cleans out the heart to leave joy and might. Still good.


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      May 29, 2008
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      Zanerus..

      Thank you. It is about God, about love.. and the ability to accept it. It is a gift. Blessings. Debby


  • FransB gold member
    May 26, 2008

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    Debby

    I have just time to read one poem of someone, and I was attracted to the title of your lovely poem. I know this is about a special love, but while reading it, I could feel you 'talking' to me too, and it made me feel good. I often fall short of this love. This poem provides an avenue to 'how to love' - "just be". My wife loves me like this, and for this I am so sore-heart grateful. Of course, God allows us to have this type of love, and it is up to me, to cleanse within so that I can give of this love - its purified form - because I can 'just be' me. Thank you for this opportunity. Frans

    • Debbysmiles gold member
      May 29, 2008
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      Frans

      What a lovely, thoughtful comment. Thank you. It is God that gives us the ability to love this way and I am very thankful. Blessings. Debby

  • Anybodys-guess
    May 20, 2008

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    I like this, it's sweet. I think this is the kind of love that comes over time, like in a marriage, or with your kids. When people know you for a long time and begin to know what you need before you do. Soft read, thanks for sharing. Later, AG

    • Debbysmiles gold member
      May 21, 2008
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      AG

      Thank you for reading and commenting. I am blessed with this kind of love.. after a long road here. Blessings. Debby

  • Word poet
    May 17, 2008

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    I like this poem its short but it flows real nicely you did agood job with this one.. Its about love a mother has for her child isn't it. Great job

    • Debbysmiles gold member
      May 19, 2008
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      Word Poet

      Thank you . Actually, it is about the love of God, the love of a man and woman united as one.. as the love a Mother feels for her children.. it is about a love that transcends time. Blessings. Debby


  • james119
    May 16, 2008
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    good write

    parallel meanings, I like it for both.

  • Bob Fox
    May 15, 2008

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    If only

    Makes me wonder if it only could be. But sadly somewhere along the line the past comes back to haunts us. Love .. Soft? no way always hard

    • Debbysmiles gold member
      May 15, 2008
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      Bob

      Sometimes the past gives us what we need to step into the future. I prefer to leave the hauntings behind. Thank you for the read and your thoughtful comments. Blessings. d


  • rustynite silver member
    March 14, 2008

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    So many won't let joy be. They have to pick at it as if it was a scab on the knee like a child. Doubt that it was meant to be. So many refuse to accept peace. Lovely write. I should visit more often. smile.


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      March 15, 2008
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      Rusty

      Thank you so much ! Joy is a gift but we have to accept it. Blessings to ya. d


  • capricornpoet
    February 15, 2008

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    transcending

    Moves with a passion , tied with a ribbon of wisdom..
    lovely and inspiring it was..touches love gently.


  • thelordreigns gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    What a beautiful poem of redemption. Our Lord does "reach in, wipe away what was, (and) allows joy to just be." He is our today, yesterday and tomorrow.

    Beautiful piece dear sis. I pray all is well with you and your precious family. I miss you!

    Love and hugs - joanne

    • Debbysmiles gold member
      February 16, 2008
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      JO

      It has been awhile and I've missed you too. I have been quiet for some time now but look out.. that is over. LOl.. You and yours remain in my prayers . Much love. Debby


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      February 16, 2008
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      Keira

      Blessings to you and thank you for the read. Glad you enjoyed. Debby

  • Page Deleted.
    February 15, 2008

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    great piece of writing. i loved the lines:
    Treasonous past loves leave
    without a place to return.
    and also the last stanza.

    Keira
    MidnightRain


  • twaintwine
    February 15, 2008

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    Quaint

    A simple, elegant painting of romantic oasis! I had a warm feeling spill across my jaded soul, and then I realized I was drooling...just kidding! For real, I love this poem because it says something positive in a straight forward, yet powerfully artistic way. It uses common words to express an uncommon experience that everyone wishes they could feel, and some have. I have! So blessed! Rock on!
    Give my music a listen at www.nakedadam.net
    Aloha!


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      February 16, 2008
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      Hawaiiansolt

      I appreciate your thoughtful comments.. and I will take a listen.. Blessings. d


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 15, 2008
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    A nice wee poem


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    think this is a key, can you be yourself and let someone else just be... relationships offer many things and personal growth can be sacrificed for many reasons...an issue...well done here...so positive...PK

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