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Of Touching






Sometimes,

when I think of touching,

your skin against mine,

the quivering air just between

my hand and your bare arm,

I feel somehow different.

I feel the grandness of the moment -

the yes, the please, the yes -

and I am compelled, driven,

to the edge of -

Come to me next time, tomorrow,

or stay, please, tonight or forever.

You are my glimpse into -

Sometimes,

I think of the moment

our lips, or the moment our skin,

and that night when we -

Sometimes I run out of words.




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  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    March 1, 2008

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    Ah, what a clever bit of expression, Scott! You have your reader filling in the blanks with their own thoughts, before that beautiful, explanatory ending. I love the description of the sensation just before touching. That was so vivid and appealing.

    This is a gorgeous write. One to be proud of!!!

  • rapedsoul
    February 27, 2008

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    wow buddy. i guess what makes this great is theway it leaves the mind grasping for the words to fill in the blank...technique or passion


  • DeadlyTurnip
    February 27, 2008

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    Aww the ending is so cute with the rest of the poem! *gushes* I really liked that a lot. No words to explain it. Just a lot.


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 26, 2008

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    I don't know who recommended this for the front page, but this is what they had to say: "Scott writes the most beautiful love poetry, and is one of the best authors on the site, in my opinion." I'd have to say they have impeccable taste. I've been reading your work for going on 4 years now, Scott (June will be 4 years since I joined). You just keep gettin' better, my Friend. Beautifully penned, Scribe. Congrats on your shiny chalice. Wanda


  • SeptemberFaith
    February 26, 2008

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    I like how some of the lines leave you hanging for the next word.. or even, allows the reader to "insert" a word of their choice. =)

    This is very sweet and I love your style.

    Criss

  • Still Gonna Shine
    February 26, 2008
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    lovely


  • Brokenpoetry123
    February 26, 2008
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    Forgot to applaud.


  • Brokenpoetry123
    February 26, 2008
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    Heart Stopping

    This poem was so beautiful it brought me to tears! Not very many things bring me to tears. Wonderful, just wonderful!
    -Chloe Danielle


  • dannyjay
    February 26, 2008
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    great poem, very touchy. loved the use of words-intense thanks for the read


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    February 26, 2008

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    Truly a beautiful and wonderful piece of poetry; very well done!
    Congratulations on your silver; much deserved!!!


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    February 26, 2008

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    This is such a lovely, sensual piece. You leave just enough to the imagination to give it a delicious sense of anticipation as well. And it's just as well that you run out of words . . . in a moment like that, they'd only get in the way.


  • Rheea gold member
    February 26, 2008
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    as always you make me want to write like that...

  • avendesora
    February 26, 2008

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    aww thats sweet. at first i was kinda confused because of the way the lines trailed off, but then that last line summed it all up nicely. very expressive. nicely don


  • Tamera
    February 26, 2008

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    "sighs", beautiful ....

    excellent expression, great images, leaving the reader dreamy eyed.


  • N e a r
    February 26, 2008
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    This is sensational.



    I am left speechless.


  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    February 17, 2008

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    this is charming. I love the c onclusion, because its true. sometimes, you just want to explain everything but can't make a coherent sentence because what you are describing is a phenomenon that takes your breath away. excellent. This makes me happy.


  • Saffron gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    This is so beautiful. I love it, really--I truly love it.


  • Providence
    February 15, 2008

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    Very nice Mr. Adelmann. Sometimes in the touch the ache of truth is so much--it takes our breath and words away!

    Bravo!
    Marianne


  • NurseChilly gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    very nice Scott, a gentle push into love...



    Gill.x


  • Hulali
    February 14, 2008

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    I love the voice this one has. Very intimate. Wonder if you need "you" in L2, but maybe taking it out would take away from the persona of this poem?

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