What price do we pay for yesterday
In human pain and dread,
Where the tears of God fill the seas
Evil damns the dead.
When impoverished cries echo the skies,
Disease has ravaged the earth;
Children tease cause killing sprees
Souls are denied at birth.
What price do we pay for ignorance
When we turn our heads and sigh,
We look starvation in the face;
Coldly walk on by.
When concerns are for ourselves
Pity is our own,
How long before we see
What we reap is what we've sown.
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So very sad and true...how long can we continue this way and except to still live on this wonderful planet...what are we leaving our children in the waste we lay upon...what do they have if not faith, love and trust...
beautifully penned in deep truth...
excellent work...
Best,
mystic
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I loved this poem...it resonated deep within me...Well Done!
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interesting- it makes me think about how we are really living our lives. it also sparked an interst in me to write a poem along the same lines- thinking about how I am living- I am doing so in accordance with what God has called me to do? And what will the ultimate consequence/ reward for doing so or not be- it will all be settled at The Bema.
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Wonderful!
Oh. I'm speechless. THIS is how I want to express myself! -
So much truth but what can we do?
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Good
When impoverished cries echo the skies,
>> I love this line you are growing openning up well to the world well done. Great suff -
Todays reality seen in our yesterdays
You see the reality of our human faults so clearly.
If only everyone would stop for a minute to deal with the inquities in our world life would be so much better.
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I Really Love The Way You Rhyme, It's Like A Natural Flow That Makes Sense.. Not Just Rhyming For The Sake Of It. The Last 4 Lines Says It All In Short. We Need To Stop Being So Hypocritical About Making A Change, You Showed Great Passion.
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This is great, a powerful message in rhyme. I love it when rhyme isn't forced and it was very well done in this piece. You make some excellent points.
Just curious- was "souls denied at birth" about abortion? or am I reading too much into it? -
Amen, Amen
Very thought-provoking and spilling over with truth
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Amen to this
I wish this could be broadcast all over the world and shut down all other then have a moment of silence .Bravo
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Penetrating...
Rainbow, this is a very wonderful right. Also, it's a powerful 'write'. I like how you put this together. It is very thought-provoking to me. I pray that it opens up the eyes and hearts; that it moves people who may have been apathetic before this. Great job here. -
This is written with such deep truth, yet sadness. I really like the title too, it makes me stop and think actually think about it. So many times no one does.
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Great Write!
I love the way you penned this my dear!
This is full of truth & wisdom. From start to finish you speak of many things that are of such predominance on our earth & in the human condition. I most certainly like the way you wrap up this piece:
When concerns are for ourselves
pity is our own,
How long before we see
what we reap is what we've sown.
Yup! That's the truth. Sow love & that's what you'll reap. Keeping sowing words of love & truth dear one! 
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Splendid
This is a great poem full of meaning it really merited a trophy instead of being an also ran.George -
Wonderful
You have a gift for reading people can really feel it in your words VERY Powerful -
Hello Pisces Rainbow.
I saw you in this contest (obviously, ahhaha), and thouht I would wish you good luck in it.
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"where childrens tease cause killing sprees" - "childrens" I believe would be "children".
I don't think the photograph goes well with the poem.
Other than that, a good poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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This is nice. The last poem reminded me of something religious, like a scripture I read in the bible.
I like this, it's so true though. Good luck!
--> pia♫♪
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What price do we pay for ignorance
when we turn our heads and sigh
when we look starvation in the face
and coldly walk on by
that was my favorite part that alone made the whole poem beautiful in its own right -
Yet another beauty
OH MY these just keep getting better and better. AWESOME so much truth, we humans are a selfish lot, well, not all of us, but most.
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wow the descriptions of the world are stunning! great job.
What price do we pay for ignorance
when we turn our heads and sigh
when we look starvation in the face
and coldly walk on by
When concerns are for ourselves
pity is our own,
How long before we see
what we reap is what we've sown
awesome words and you are definately a talented poet. -
Nicely written. Your words hold so much power. Great job.
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Hello Pisces Rainbow. Another excellent poem by you; creates a very cataclysmic image while still lamenting that which is being painting. And this line is a great line “When impoverished cries echo the skies……” . It is also a thought provoking piece, which is always a must in my book. My regards.
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BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN!!!
So much we must realize before a change can be made, will we come to know our mistakes and correct them? I don't see much hope in that right now.
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Cool!!!!!!!!!! I am speechless!!!!!!! In a good way!!!! Good luck
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I'll admit this is good but it needs to be 15-40 words so umm ur gunna have to shorten it or write something new =*(
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Hell of a piece of writing here. Very very deep. The words really hit home. Very beautiful and sad and almost mournful. I loved this one too. The truth is written here.
Love
Wayne Leon
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A lot of wisdom and compassion in your words!
Best of Luck in the contest!
Maureen
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Good gosh!
Poetess, Poetess...how good you've done with this. Wow! I hardly ever get stunned by much these days; this piece (though) is certainly an exception. The messages here twist my mind and compete for my attention. These lines tugged at my mind and soul:
"When impoverished cries echo the skies
disease has ravaged the earth..." This is superb to me. And heart-wrenchingly real. Incredibly strong. Great messages. Wow...
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Powerful words & True!
Ah...my friend we are kindred spirits! Your words echo deep in my being. We [this country & also ourselves] will reap the rewards of what we've sown. It's so important that we take every opportunity to do what we can for our fellow man. This is a world of pain & illusion & we need be alert & on guard to make the most of our time & mind to be a part of the solution & not the problem. We can all only do so much, but we must do what we can! Thanks so much for this write!
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This is so very,very good. It is time for the cycle to be broken by our deeds and words of love.
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Very nice read indeed
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Great Stuff ,
You've done, a wonderful job here. Execution is great far as I can see. Lines, rhyme, maintain continuity of the thought this produces a pleasant read.Well done . Tip 'my hat to you
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wow another marvelous piece--sad it ended so early lol but it was great....
Godbless....;]
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Brilliantly Said
Kathleen hun you've said it that needs to be heard by every soul on this earth... but unfortunately we choose to ignore and keep living the way we do - twisted lies... thanks for reminding us not only to stop & think, but also act before its far too late... thanks for a beautiful reminder of ugly truth... take care Minoo
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I loved the whole poem as it was manifested through the mouth of God into your pen. It realistic facts are what some try not to hear or see however how true it be. I thank you for sharing this incredible poem with me and God Bless you...
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a lot of spiritual stuff to feel and understand your pen is just the word of God spreading in the society it really is and the lines below just bloom in this poem
When our concerns are for ourselves
and pity is our own,
How long before we see
what we reap is what we've sown.
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I am in AWE! of your words my friend...Wisdom flows softly from your pen:f how long before we see what we reap is what we've sown...Truth's!!
Niaish so much for sharing with me!
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thank you for your gracious comment God bless
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Wow, the rhythm and rhyme lying within this piece of writing is absolutely incredible! Such thought-provoking questions, deep and meaningful, and if we'd all take a little time to think about and pray for others, maybe the world could feel a sense of peace at last. This subject keeps coming up in my life through friends and acquaintances. I guess it's something that you can never hear enough either. Wonderful writing!! Love your style.
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WOW SO TRUE! This poem almost scares me because its the truest reality of it all, how selfish and self willed we as people can be. May god bless you, as you speak this truth!
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Excellent
Actually your write speaks volumns. But will we ever learn? The flow is perfect and the questions right on. And , oh , it was a bit of fresh air to read a poem with sex in it
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excellent write
In verse you have captured a message of warning to all of us who seem so complacent with watching so much injustice go down in this world. Yes we will be disappointed if we try to change the world we will also be sucessful if we change ourselves one by one. We see we know we do not do. Yes what we have sown we shall reap so warn the wicked and encourage the weak sinners to repent. This write is so on time I enjoyed reading it and I pray I grow for the task at hand. Peace
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I love your poem, its plain to see
emotions drive the thoughts you free
Your ryhme is great, it flows real nice
a powerful message, poetic spice
rudolf
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This poem has a wonderful flow to it and asks some very powerful questions. I agree it makes a need for some self-examination.
~Amanda~
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Goosebumps ~
The ONLY thing I can critique about this write, would be the word, *ravished*......as I believe *ravaged* is the word you are looking for??
Besides that, an incredible Theme with such a powerful message.....an excellent job with your Tone and Flow as well ~
Your last 2 lines are brilliant.....I wish this had been in a contest,
....my contest....hehe ~
Bear ~
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Arkbear
thank you my friend for a gracious comment, (ravage) thats the ticket. thank you God bless
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Excellent
This is excellent--Great verse structure and wording with a perfect flow!
Profound questions asked that leads the reader to self examination!--Well Done!!!
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This is a really great right and i really agree with the message. it is so true i really love it.
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The increasing evil, lack of love and compassion, the disgraceful injustice and incredible indifference and ignorance that this world is forced to endure, are burdens every soul bears. It is often too much to bear for many. The few wicked spirits accountable for all agony taking place in this place think and act far beyond the ability to perceive most have. Yesterday's mistakes were never corrected, they were made worse. With every crime committed the doomed soul's fate will become more harsh. It is incredible that they fail to understand this. Sometimes evil crosses borders that even urges the wicked to reconsider, yet there are some still who appear to remain unaffected by such unspeakable crimes. It is the biggest mistake they were capable of making. The sad thing about their crimes is the suffering caused by their atrocities. The innocent blood that was spilled. I hope the message such as is contained in your poem will incite the world to reconsider its conduct. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
Chris
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A powerful piece you have penned. Your words are so true and sadly sums up most of the human race. It no longer matters where it all started going so wrong, the damage is irreversible. All we can do is be the best we can be and create a haven for ourselfs and those we love.
In the words of gandhi
'Be the change you want to see in the world'
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Bravo!
Beautifully writtem, nice flow and rhyme. Such a easy poem to read without losing the meaning of the verses. Reap what we have sown. A concept lost on to many people, yet a reality we and our children will live with. Excellent piece.
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Beautifully written with honest feelings and very thought provoking as we are all guilty of staying mostly in our own selfish little world. Very well done
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"Speak with a honest heart and the truth shall be revealed."
-SJK
you have hit the mark! this perfectly describes society and how we react to the things that, with a little love, could be fixed in no time at all.
>>>where the tears of God fill the seas
and the evil dams the dead.
brilliant! yes, God cries everyday because of the corruption caused by men who had forgotten God, and nice comparision of His tears to the sea. It is true,, evil damns*(you mispelled it) the ones who have already passed on without Christ in their heart.
Good Write! Brilliant piece!
-Smarelious J. Kirby
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DeInkslinger
thank you for your comment and thank you for pointing out my mispell. GOD BLESS
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