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Lifeline Broken

My shadow drapes itself in a shroud of self-doubt 
So frightened that being myself will return me to naught

Receiving reactions from here and there, I am runaground

I am moving on, no love to call my own it seems

 

Oh no

 

Love can mean anything; understanding, compassion, faith

Beauty is within, and never without freedom of change

I am soothed by gravity in the sense of natural fortitude

And I bring to the world I'm living in... peace

 

One step

 

Towards the heaviness of duty to serve the astute

I'd might as well surrender now to the words I speak

Someone made me, someone gets in the way

Of the destiny calling to me and my eyes

 

Oh you

 

Hold on to what is yours inside your vervaceous mind

I need something to blame, it's never me, no, it's you

Incomplete is what you are, without... without...

Incomplete is what you are without me

Author notes

Written on 14th February 2008 at 23:54 GMT

My first poem since last August. Fleffin nora... Have I ever gone that long without writing?

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  • LavendeRFlameS
    November 12
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    This makes me feel so sad. I do relate to this though


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    November 10
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    Aw.. very sweet poem, I agree with the person before me. Impressive.

    I liked the repetition of the "O" words between stanzas.

    Something to improve on:

    My shadow drapes itself in a shroud of self-doubt
    So frightened that being myself will return me to naught

    The rhyme there seemed a little forced and awkward.

    Thanks for entering.

    7/10

    Try again.

    - Blue beauty

  • ogre1971
    January 14
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    Impressive.

  • celadia
    February 14, 2008

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    This was a really heartfelt entry and I found it quite appealing. You have definately gone too long without writing.

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