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I tend to be a little bitchy
when the room starts to spin
           
Cause when you're flying off your rocker
Who the hell cares if you have a reason
To be a complete ass

gosh I need to learn how to be a little  bit more rash

But hey crazy can be a little sexy
It can also be a little sleazy
Hell my genration is the posterchild for anything postdramatic shit

I bet you can't believe I just said that
By hey don't be surprise
Crazy people tend to say things that are down right shocking

[Shocking!!!]

Like the wasted minutes of you actually reading this rant
Probably wondering if it's time for me to take my loopy pills
Sorry if I offended people with my latest statement

This is stranger than the time I forgot my love in another past time



Author notes

Hey dear lovely poets...I'm trying to lean over to te crazy/funny/isane/darker side of life.

I'm not making fun of people who have/has disorders or is consider "crazy"...I'm just stating that society has a tendency to label people "crazy"...even when they are not. This poem probably doesn't make any damn sense...and if it doesn't sorry I'm experimenting.

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  • Nameless-Unknown
    March 10, 2008

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    The general poem is quite good, a nice observation of society, however, if you'd allow me to pick faults, I would like to point out "Sorry if I affended people with my latest statement" should use the word offended, and "This is stranger then the time I forgot my love in another past time" should use than rather than then. Otherwise, a good poem. Not being nasty, trying to help.


    • bloved
      March 10, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your honest and helpful remarks...I actually find it refreshing to hear/read a critucal critique. I don't think you were being nasty, I felt you were being helpful...and I appreciated your response


  • autumns rising
    February 15, 2008

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    wow so true. there are these little things that have posioned our generation. Mostly the media. some people argue that the media depicts society, but others say the society is influenced by the media. But I think the media picks up random stereotypes, no matter how true or false, and then they blow them up. Then you have these impressionable tweens who think dressing revealing is cute but they are just being objectified. Our world is crazy, it sucks but maybe there is hope


  • Bryan-CarnelianHope
    February 14, 2008

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    It shouldn't have to make sense, all that matters is you get these feelings out We shouldn't have to have a reason to get things off our mind.
    I agree, our generation is a bit shocking. 12 year olds dressed like prostitutes, kids already getting drunk before highschool .
    Maybe the next will do better than us?


    • bloved
      February 14, 2008
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      good-ness-gracious

      I know its a little bit...or a lot much scary!!!!

      I'm 17 and got drunk once...and did not really like it at ALL!...and yes little girls dressing like husseys is not cute...quite scary!

      Yes maybe or future kids will learn from are dumb ass mistakes!

      and yes thanks for reading...this poem is all over the place..and I like it like that!!!!

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